Here is another review. 
 
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Von: ext Mayutan A. [mailto:[EMAIL PROTECTED] 
Gesendet: Mittwoch, 20. Juni 2007 09:45
An: Tschofenig, Hannes
Betreff: Re: SIP SAML Comments


HI Hannes , 

I do not have any major comments on the SIP SAML  draft. 
My comments are limited to spelling mistakes. 

Section 5 , sentence 1 
"Because the those " is wrong. suggestion remove "the"

section 6.1.2 , 2nd para , first sentence 
"Although this profile is overview" ... suggestion "profile's "

section 6.1.3 , 3rd sentence  , 
separate is spelt wrong

section 6.3.1.1 , 3rd sentence
"The particulars of how this is accomplished depend upon
implementation.." sounds wrong .. suggestion "dependS upon THE" 

section 6.3.1.2 , last line
proceeds is spelt wrongly

section 6.3.1.3 , first line
Makes more sense if the first line begins with THE

6.1.3.4 ,  2nd sentence
It has "the the" 

6.1.4.1, attribute ID
requirement is spelt wrong

section 7.1, 3rd para
this profile of the SAML URI Binding is congruent with the SAML URI
binding ---- does not make sense

Mayutan


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