On Wed, Jul 15, 2009 at 04:02:13PM -0400, Chris Pepper wrote: > Hello, > > Below please find some suggested language cleanups for the SI > introduction. > > Thanks for SI! > > Chris Pepper >
Chris, the content of the patch looks good for me, but the patch is broken, probably you've the word wrap is enabled in thunderbird and tabs have been replaced with space... These are the errors if I try to apply the patch (using the command patch BTW): patching file intro.sgml Hunk #1 FAILED at 4. Hunk #2 FAILED at 14. Hunk #3 FAILED at 53. Hunk #4 FAILED at 97. Hunk #5 FAILED at 116. Hunk #6 FAILED at 164. Hunk #7 FAILED at 173. Hunk #8 FAILED at 222. Hunk #9 FAILED at 231. Hunk #10 FAILED at 352. 10 out of 10 hunks FAILED -- saving rejects to file intro.sgml.rej Could you send it back as attachment, or inline but using a suitable patch format. Many thanks! -Andrea > > Index: intro.sgml > =================================================================== > --- intro.sgml (revision 4468) > +++ intro.sgml (working copy) > @@ -4,7 +4,7 @@ > <title>SystemImager Overview</title> > <para> > <application>SystemImager</application>, a component of the > - <application>System Installation Suite</application> is software > + <application>System Installation Suite</application>, is software > that automates <application>GNU/Linux</application> installs, > software distribution, and production deployment. > </para> > @@ -14,7 +14,7 @@ > kind of GNU/Linux distribution (standard or even customized) to any > kind of target > machine. The main goal of the project is to make deployment of > large numbers of > computers easy. Typical environments include computer labs and > render farms, > - but it has proven particularly popular in clustered computing > environments, > + but SystemImager has proven particularly popular in clustered > computing environments, > such as grid and high performance computing. > </para> > <para> > @@ -53,7 +53,7 @@ > <itemizedlist> > <listitem> > <para> > - Organizations that have Internet server farms > + Organizations with Internet server farms > </para> > </listitem> > <listitem> > @@ -97,9 +97,9 @@ > </para> > <para> > After initial image deployment, you can update the client systems by > - syncing them to an updated image on the image server. Updates > are fast > + syncing them from an updated image on the image server. Updates > are fast > and efficient because only the modified parts of files are pulled to > - the client. > + the clients. > </para> > <section> > <title>Supported Distributions</title> > @@ -116,8 +116,8 @@ > distribution. To determine a system's footprint, > <application>SystemConfigurator</application> identifies the > configuration files in use and associates that footprint with a > - configuration style. It then correctly makes settings, such as hostname > - or IP address, without needing to know the name of the distribution. > + configuration style. It then correctly manages settings, such as > hostname > + and IP address, without needing to know the name of the distribution. > </para> > > <para> > @@ -164,7 +164,7 @@ > <application>tftpd-hpa</application> and > <application>atftpd</application> > packages, while Red Hat 7.0 and later include such a server in the > <application>tftp-server</application> package. H. Peter Anvin > - maintains the <application>tftp-hpa</application> package that > + maintains the <application>tftp-hpa</application> package, which > provides the required functionality. > </para> > </listitem> > @@ -173,17 +173,18 @@ > In addition to a compatible TFTP server, PXE network-based > installations may also require a PXE daemon to run on your > image server. This requirement depends on the firmware used on > - the client side and the capabilities of your DHCP server. > + the clients and the capabilities of your DHCP server. > Usually a running PXE daemon is not necessary if the image server > - uses a quite recent distributions, since all the recent versions > - of the DHCP daemon include the PXE functionalities. > + uses a recent distribution, since all recent versions > + of the DHCP daemon include PXE functionality. > </para> > </listitem> > <listitem> > <para> > - To properly setup a boot server it is strongly suggested > - the usage of the <command>si_mkbootserver(8)</command> > - tool, included in <application>SystemImager</application>. > + We strongly recommend usage of the > + <command>si_mkbootserver(8)</command> tool, included in > + <application>SystemImager</application>, to properly set up > + a boot server. > </para> > </listitem> > </itemizedlist> > @@ -221,7 +222,7 @@ > <glossdef> > <para> > Overrides can be used to manage differences from images. A typical > - use is to customize a "vanilla" image adding some additional > + use is to customize a "vanilla" image by adding additional > packages, but they are commonly used to store and distribute > configuration files by <command>si_pushoverrides(8)</command>. > </para> > @@ -230,8 +231,8 @@ > (this directory can be changed in the configuration file > <command>/etc/systemimager.conf</command>). > All the files and directories defined inside an override are > - distributed exactly as they are, that means preserving > - <emphasis>all</emphasis> the data and also metadata: permissions, > + distributed exactly as-is, which means preserving > + <emphasis>all</emphasis> data and metadata: permissions, > ownership, timestamps, etc. > </para> > <para> > @@ -351,7 +352,7 @@ > <glossdef> > <para> > A tool to manage and show the SystemImager cluster topology. > - By this command is possible to tells your image server which > + Using this command, it is possible to tell your image server which > image and overrides to install on the auto-install clients. > </para> > </glossdef> > ------------------------------------------------------------------------------ Enter the BlackBerry Developer Challenge This is your chance to win up to $100,000 in prizes! 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