For Omar, Joe and I previously discussed trying to jump on John Oliver's
social pull.... and I nearly forget to get him the quotes to do so. My
suggestions:

The outside world knows very little about former Taliban leader Mohammed
Omar, so little that it just found out he died two years ago. The US
government, as <link>John Oliver</link> noted on Sunday, had "vivid
descriptions" of him, including "hair: black" and "height: tall."

Shorter:
As John Oliver noted last Sunday, the US government was able to come up
with "vivid descriptions" of former Taliban leader Mohammed Omar, including
"hair: black" and "height: tall."

Shortest:
As John Oliver noted last Sunday, former Taliban leader Mohammed Omar "had
been dead for two years, and [they] simply hadn't mentioned it.

Best,
--Ed

On Wed, Aug 5, 2015 at 8:09 PM, James Alexander <[email protected]>
wrote:

> Nice! Comments in line.
>
> James Alexander
> Community Advocacy
> Wikimedia Foundation
> (415) 839-6885 x6716 @jamesofur
>
> On Wed, Aug 5, 2015 at 5:56 PM, Joe Sutherland <[email protected]>
> wrote:
>
>> Hey all,
>>
>> We just published "News on Wikipedia: Beijing wins Winter Olympics, MH370
>> wreckage recovered, and more" to the Wikimedia blog. URL:
>>
>> https://blog.wikimedia.org/2015/08/05/beijing-olympics-mh370-wreckage/
>>
>> We plan to send out five pieces of social for this story, spread through
>> the next *three days* (or thereabouts) to keep things timely.
>>
>> Please do comment for tone.
>>
>> *Twitter:*
>>
>> • China's capital Beijing will host the 2022 Winter Olympics.
>> #NewsOnWikipedia
>>
> LGTM
>
> [Sidenote - this is going to make the mental disambiguation of saying
> "Beijing Olympics" in my head really annoying]
>
>
>> • Barack Obama (@potus) announced his Clean Power Plan this week.
>> #cleanpower #NewsOnWikipedia
>>
>
> LGTM
>
>
>> • Wreckage found on French island Réunion is from missing plane #MH370.
>> #NewsOnWikipedia
>>
>
> Perhaps "French territory *of *Réunion" ? That sounds better to me but
> I'm not actually sure if it's more correct/better. You'll know the grammar
> side better then I :). Otherwise LGTM
>
>
>> • Zimbabwe have requested the extradition of an American hunter for
>> #Cecil's killing. #NewsOnWikipedia
>> • Secretive Taliban leader Mohammed Omar actually died in 2013.
>> #NewsOnWikipedia
>>
>
> Both LGTM
>
>
>> *Facebook/G+:*
>>
>> • Beijing beat out Almaty of Kazakhstan to become the host city for the
>> 2022 Winter Olympics this week. #NewsOnWikipedia
>>
>
> Hmmmm.... I'm torn between "Almaty of Kazakhstan" (which sounds awesome
> but kinda sounds like an aristocratic name to me) and "Almaty, Kazakhstan".
> Happy with either, otherwise LGTM
>
> • Barack Obama unveiled his Clean Power Plan this week. #NewsOnWikipedia
>>
>
> LGTM
>
> • Plane parts found on the French territory Réunion were this week
>> confirmed as from missing Malaysia Airlines Flight 370. #NewsOnWikipedia
>>
>
> Same "of" question as above, otherwise LGTM
>
> • Zimbabwe last week requested the extradition of American hunter Walter
>> Palmer following the killing of Cecil the lion. #NewsOnWikipedia
>>
>
> perhaps "f*ormally* requested the extradition" ? (I'm not actually sure
> that's true but I think it is? Just thinking that's different then some of
> the random statements they mentioned about wanting extradition earlier).
> Otherwise LGTM
>
>
>> • Currently, only two images exist of former Taliban leader Mohammed
>> Omar. This week it was confirmed that he died two years ago.
>> #NewsOnWikipedia
>>
>>
> Hmm, I'm happy with this one (I like the images fact) but worry that it
> could feel like a bit of a non sequitur. Perhaps tying it together with
> something like:
>
>
>    - Currently, only two images exist of former Taliban leader Mohammed
>    Omar. *It's likely to stay that way unless more are found because t*his
>    week it was confirmed that he died two years ago. #NewsOnWikipedia
>
> best,
>> Joe
>>
>> --
>> *Joe Sutherland*
>> Communications Intern [remote]
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>> JSutherland <https://meta.wikimedia.org/wiki/User:JSutherland_(WMF)>
>>
>>
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