Hi, sajolida wrote (19 Jan 2015 23:10:07 GMT) : > I've been silently working for a while on fixing our oldest hole in the > roof: Adapt documentation from Incognito!
\o/ > So please review doc/7143-virtualization. > Consider this as an initial version, and please comment on it. There are > still probably quite a lot of things to adjust. Merged master into it, added a few commits on top. Comments: * "When running Tails in a virtual machine, you can use all the features of Tails" seems pretty bold, and is not always true. * config/chroot_local-includes/usr/local/bin/tails-virt-notify-user still points to doc/advanced_topics/virtualization.en.html; should it point to the #security anchor on that page instead? * "if the host operating system uses swap" --> not all OSes use the word "swap" (see the corresponding — "Paging" — page on Wikipedia); WP's page is highly technical, so I wouldn't recommend pointing to it, but it's probably worth mentioning other well-spread synonyms. * "The Tails virtual machine does not modify the behaviour of the host operating system and its network traffic is not anonymized" --> not clear what "its" refers to. * I'm dubious about the use of "Virt-manager": on my sid system, it's called "Virtual Machine Manager". That's also the title of its web homepage. And in other places, its author call it "virt-manager". I've never seen it called "Virt-manager", so I propose to pick one of the two widespread wording instead. * "With the shared folders feature of VirtualBox you can access files of your host system from within the guest system." --> IMO that's blocked by, and should point to, the piece of doc about the risks of accessing the local hard disk from Tails, that (IIRC) BitingBird has been working on. * I suggest always using a non-breakable whitespace between "OS" and "X", in "OS X", to avoid slightly ugly and confusing rendering in the browser. Yay, nitpicking ;) * "For instructions on how to install VirtualBox on other operating systems, refer to their official documentation" --> "their" seems to refer to "other operating systems", which is obviously not what you mean. * "1. Start VirtualBox. To create a new virtual machine: 1. Choose Machine ▸ New...." -> the single "1." initial bullet feels strange. * "if the virtual machine is to have a 32-bit processor" --> missing word? either "configured to have" or "configured with". * "choose Choose a virtual CD/DVD disk file" feels strange. Maybe that's a case where we shouldn't follow the doc style guidelines too rigidly. I've not looked at the Boxes and virt-manager pages yet. I'll do that in a next iteration, once the above issues are fixed. Impressive work! Cheers, -- intrigeri _______________________________________________ Tails-dev mailing list [email protected] https://mailman.boum.org/listinfo/tails-dev To unsubscribe from this list, send an empty email to [email protected].
