Hi Robert, Thanks for the review, and I’m glad this was a useful reference for you. You can find an updated version of the document here:
https://ietf-tapswg.github.io/draft-ietf-taps-transport-security/draft-ietf-taps-transport-security.html <https://ietf-tapswg.github.io/draft-ietf-taps-transport-security/draft-ietf-taps-transport-security.html> We have added new text to address all of the editorial points you brought up. Thanks, Tommy > On Apr 6, 2020, at 10:12 AM, Robert Wilton via Datatracker <[email protected]> > wrote: > > Robert Wilton has entered the following ballot position for > draft-ietf-taps-transport-security-11: Yes > > When responding, please keep the subject line intact and reply to all > email addresses included in the To and CC lines. (Feel free to cut this > introductory paragraph, however.) > > > Please refer to https://www.ietf.org/iesg/statement/discuss-criteria.html > for more information about IESG DISCUSS and COMMENT positions. > > > The document, along with other ballot positions, can be found here: > https://datatracker.ietf.org/doc/draft-ietf-taps-transport-security/ > > > > ---------------------------------------------------------------------- > COMMENT: > ---------------------------------------------------------------------- > > As incoming AD I found that document really useful and informative - thank > you. > > As a minor nit, I found the English around the usage of the term "Transport > Services", that I wasn't familiar with prior to reading this document, > slightly > tricky to parse in the introduction, particularly because the term isn't > defined until the Terminology in section 3. > > E.g. in the second paragraph it isn't clear to me what a "Transport Services > system" real means. Possibly replace "a Transport Services system may need to > support" with "a Transport Service may need to support"? > > Similarly, perhaps change " One of the goals of Transport Services is to > define > a common interface for using transport protocols" to " One of the goals of > Transport Service definitions is to define a common interface for using > transport protocols"? > > > > _______________________________________________ > Taps mailing list > [email protected] > https://www.ietf.org/mailman/listinfo/taps
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