I like the revision .... considerable improvement.
but in the first three requirements i belive that the dictates of
idiomatic english require the use of the work definition - a
noun.....what follows is a definition and not define a verb which
talks about a process when what follows is not the process but the
outcome... ie the definition
then number 12. use a multifold of links
MULTIFOLD!!??? adjective
noun is needed...perhaps multiplicity?
use many links is OK
multifold is too fancy a word......
this is an absolutely critical concept for the methodology and it is
NOT clearly stated at all here
perhaps what is meant is: use many links at many different levels????
rather than putting everything into ONE vessel you are putting
security etc into many different mechanisms and are presenting
attackers with many obstacles to over come.... if this is what 12 is
getting at then iit REALLY needs to say so.......
Multifold is simply the WRONG word..... if for some reason you insist
on using it, you MUST then in the next sentence say why
finally in number four "information theoretic privacy" -- this
sounds impressive but it also sounds like overkill...... without a
degree in advanced mathematics how am i to know that you have
achieved this????
those whom you want to convince don't have such degrees
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