On Fri, Mar 26, 2010 at 12:32:15PM -0400, Anders Langworthy wrote: > On Fri, Mar 26, 2010 at 3:25 AM, Jason McIntyre <j...@kerhand.co.uk> wrote: > > On Thu, Mar 25, 2010 at 09:05:01PM -0400, Anders Langworthy wrote: > >> > >> Here is an updated diff with that in mind: > >> > >> Index: fdisk.8 > >> =================================================================== > >> RCS file: /cvs/src/sbin/fdisk/fdisk.8,v > >> retrieving revision 1.67 > >> diff -u -p -u -p -r1.67 fdisk.8 > >> --- fdisk.8 B 30 Mar 2009 04:52:50 -0000 B B B 1.67 > >> +++ fdisk.8 B 26 Mar 2010 01:01:51 -0000 > >> @@ -44,7 +44,7 @@ On the i386 and other architectures, sec > >> B must contain MBR bootcode, the MBR partition table containing 4 slots, > >> B and a specific magic number (0xAA55). > >> B The 4 slots in the MBR partition table allow a disk drive to be > >> -sub-divided up into chunks known as MBR partitions. > >> +sub-divided into chunks known as MBR partitions. > > > > hmm. if you can divide sth up (and you can), why can't you sub-divide > > sth up? i don;t actually know if you can or not. i guess this reads > > better. > > Nothing grammatically incorrect about either situation, but the "up" > doesn't add anything and feels awkward in the latter case. > > >> -The fields of the output are thus: > >> +The fields of the output are: > > > > why is this better? > > It's shorter with the same meaning. Also "thus" implies the following > text is explained by the preceding text (which it isn't, really). > > > note also that we document b/k/m/g for the print command. do you think > > there's a way we could avoid duplication here? and if not, is there a > > way we can try and minimise the differences between the two text > > segments? > > I agree totally. Hmm maybe something like this? > > Index: fdisk.8 > =================================================================== > RCS file: /cvs/src/sbin/fdisk/fdisk.8,v > retrieving revision 1.67 > diff -u -p -u -p -r1.67 fdisk.8 > --- fdisk.8 30 Mar 2009 04:52:50 -0000 1.67 > +++ fdisk.8 26 Mar 2010 16:24:32 -0000 > @@ -44,7 +44,7 @@ On the i386 and other architectures, sec > must contain MBR bootcode, the MBR partition table containing 4 slots, > and a specific magic number (0xAA55). > The 4 slots in the MBR partition table allow a disk drive to be > -sub-divided up into chunks known as MBR partitions. > +sub-divided into chunks known as MBR partitions.
I think 'sub-divided' can just be replaced with 'divided'. Reads much better to me. .... Ken
