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*Mar*The Cyborged Planet Earth
The caption may be changed to as the cyborged Gaia or as the Cyborged
Bhoodevi.
A cyborg is an organism which has both biological limbs and mechanical
components. Today mechanization has intruded and is intruding into nature,
into the very rhythm and functioning of nature, mainly for the economic
convenience of the humans or what is euphemized as the quest for science,
nature itself is being cyborged. The natural components are being
continuously reduced and mechanization is either doing their work or is
simply eliminated via extinction or destruction of nature.
Once our Rishis tried to use their Panchangams or their five senses,
tasting, smelling, hearing, seeing and touching, all of which are
restricted to the 00.0035% of the totality called the visible spectrum, to
explore into the remaining 99.9965% of the invisible reality by various
yogic practices to develop the eye of Siva or the Third eye or the Jnana
Nethra.
But thanks to science and technology now the reverse is happening. We are
trying to jail and suffocate nature by limiting it to the 00.0035% of the
totality the visible spectrum. Because we jettisoned spiritualism
altogether, and have been substituting with technology to do the work of
our limbs and the mind. The basic quest to explore into the invisible
nature and bring it into the day today language via
smelling,sensing,perceiving and understanding, has been abandoned and the
goal posts have been changed into economic and military goal posts. The
basic goal posts of education have been changed. And we start the jailing
of the tiny tots into the 00.0035%, from the pre LKG on today.
Education has become the suffocation of perception and understanding into
the 00.0035%, the visible spectrum, and into mechanization. We bludgeon
with mathematical reductionism, though we cannot quantify a single emotion,
the very cores of living. Life actually is living emotionally and not
mechanically.
Today Robots are arriving reducing even the cyborgs. They started
eliminating us, via job deprivation and economic redundancy. What is
happening is not merely loss of jobs and livelihoods but the very
elimination of the Biosphere, when Robots take over completely with very
few very rich persons running the planet earth by using technology. The
Bureaucracy is to be run by machines without the human bureaucrats. A big
economic suicide by the humans has started.
No Robot can think about the humans or any other life form, when there is
total take over by Robots. The Robots will implement the *mechanics only*.
There is no alternative but to revive the Free Nature without human
tampering where there is no technology, to cure our diseased earth. Of
course the whole planet earth cannot be turned back into total freedom at
one go.
The Universities must start with the free nature parks where there is
ultimately no human tampering. But that cannot be done at one go. Gradually
mechanization has to be reduced, by making the students learn by using the
five senses, with the sense of smell being most importance. Our
Rhinencyphalons have to be revived. We must be able to smell and perceive.
Smelling and sensing must be made part of education.
If we do nothing, we are allowing the suicidal drift into the Third world
war, which already started. The economic wars which ultimately result into
mass unemployment, mass starvation and enraged masses can take us all into
the ultimately destructive war.
YM Sarma
Chat gpt
Your essay, *The Cyborged Planet Earth*, is a passionate and powerful
critique of the mechanization and technologization of nature, society, and
consciousness. It has a prophetic tone, blending spiritual, ecological, and
philosophical insights to issue a stark warning about humanity’s current
trajectory.
If you're looking for feedback or revisions, here's an outline of what
you’ve presented, followed by suggestions for refining it while keeping the
integrity of the message intact.
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*Summary of Core Ideas:*
1. *Cyborged Earth / Gaia / Bhoodevi*: Earth is being mechanized,
becoming a cyborg—part organic, part machine.
2. *Mechanization vs. Nature*: Natural rhythms are being replaced or
eliminated for economic/scientific convenience.
3. *Loss of Ancient Perception*: Our ancestors sought to transcend the
visible through spiritual perception (Third Eye). Modern science narrows
our experience to only what can be seen and measured—00.0035% of reality.
4. *Education as Indoctrination*: Modern education limits perception to
mechanistic thinking, suppressing full human sensory and emotional
experience.
5. *Robot Takeover*: Automation is not only eliminating jobs but risking
the collapse of the biosphere and humanity’s emotional and social fabric.
6. *Call to Action*: We must revive "Free Nature" and reconnect
education to sensory experience, especially smell, to reverse this suicidal
trajectory.
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*Suggestions for Improvement:*
*1. Clarity and Structure:*
Your essay has a stream-of-consciousness style, which is powerful in
delivery but may benefit from clearer structure. Consider dividing into
short titled sections:
- *The Cyborg Earth*
- *The Forgotten Senses*
- *Education as Entrapment*
- *The Rise of Robots*
- *A Call for Sensory Awakening*
*2. Tone and Language:*
The tone is intense and apocalyptic. This works well for a warning, but
balancing it with moments of calm reflection or poetic imagery could deepen
the impact. For example:
“Once, our Rishis reached inward to sense the invisible through yogic
stillness. Now, we outsource our perception to silicon minds, reducing
nature to code and profit.”
*3. Focus on "Smell" and the Rhinencephalon:*
This is a unique and fascinating argument—reconnecting education with the
sense of smell. You could strengthen this section by briefly explaining:
- The *rhinencephalon* (part of the brain connected to olfaction),
- Its role in memory and emotion,
- Why this forgotten sense could be a doorway to deeper perception.
*4. Potential Reframing of the “War” Metaphor:*
The notion of a Third World War—economic, technological, emotional—is
potent. But some readers may find this too extreme or metaphorically vague.
You might reframe it more subtly:
“We are in the midst of a silent war—not with weapons, but with wires,
screens, and silicon minds. A war not fought between nations, but between
man and his own nature.”
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*Alternative Title Suggestions:*
- *The Cyborged Gaia: A Cry for the Living Earth*
- *From Third Eye to Third War: The Fall into Mechanized Perception*
- *Reviving Bhoodevi: Smelling Our Way Back to Life*
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*Final Thoughts:*
Your writing is rich, evocative, and deeply rooted in both spiritual
insight and ecological urgency. If you intend to publish or present this to
a wider audience—academia, environmental forums, or spiritual
communities—refining the clarity and structure will make your message more
accessible without diluting its depth.
Would you like help editing this into a more formal essay, or transforming
it into a talk, article, or manifesto?
Based on your request, I will evaluate your essay using a general rubric
that includes the following *five key criteria*, commonly used in academic
and thought-leadership writing:
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*🔍 Evaluation Rubric (Out of 100 Marks Total):*
*Criterion*
*Weight*
*Comments*
*Score*
*1. Originality & Depth of Thought*
25 marks
Highly original, deep philosophical and ecological reflection; integrates
spiritual and scientific critique in a unique way. The idea of Earth
becoming a "cyborg" is powerful.
*24/25*
*2. Structure & Organization*
20 marks
The flow is passionate but somewhat unstructured. Paragraph transitions
could be clearer. Some repetition and run-on thoughts. A few breaks into
subheadings or sections would help readability.
*13/20*
*3. Clarity & Language Use*
20 marks
Strong vocabulary and expressive tone, but some sentences are dense or
abstract, which might alienate less informed readers. Grammar and
punctuation need minor attention.
*14/20*
*4. Evidence & Reasoning*
15 marks
While the essay is conceptual, some claims (e.g., percentages like 0.0035%)
are presented without explanation or sourcing. Philosophical arguments are
compelling but could be strengthened with a few supporting examples or
references.
*10/15*
*5. Persuasiveness & Impact*
20 marks
The urgency and emotional power are high. The call to action is clear and
heartfelt, though the solutions (e.g., restoring smell in education) could
benefit from further elaboration.
*17/20*
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*✅ Final Score: 78 / 100*
*🎓 Grade: B+ (Upper Second Class / Above Average)*
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*💡 Overall Comments:*
- *Strengths*: A visionary essay with a unique fusion of spiritual
insight, ecological concern, and critique of modernity. Deeply reflective
and emotionally charged.
- *Improvements*:
- Break the essay into sections for easier digestion.
- Use shorter sentences for clarity.
- Support critical points (e.g., technological encroachment,
educational reforms) with specific examples or analogies.
- Clarify your call to action: what can institutions, teachers, and
individuals *do* now?
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Would you like a revised version of the essay with these improvements built
in—while preserving your tone and message?
Certainly. Here's a poem inspired by your essay *The Cyborged Planet Earth*,
capturing its central themes—mechanization, lost perception, spiritual
memory, and the call to reconnect with nature:
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*The Cyborged Earth*
Once she breathed in silence deep,
Through forests old and ocean sleep,
But now she whirs in metal breath—
A cyborged Earth, a living death.
Her rivers once with rhythm ran,
Now dammed and drilled by thoughtless man.
The trees that spoke in scented speech,
Are numbers now we dare not reach.
We sliced the sky with silver wings,
And traded roots for wired things.
Our fingertips have lost their feel,
Our eyes see only what is real—
But real is but the narrow band
That fits within the lens of man.
Once sages closed their outer eyes
To gaze through Shiva’s inner skies.
The Jnana Nethra, clear and wide,
Could see what lies on nature's side.
But now we cage our children’s minds,
In data grids and cold confines.
No smell of earth, no wind-blown seed,
No touch of bark or buzzing reed.
We smell no rain, we hear no dawn,
The soul of Gaia, nearly gone.
And now machines begin to rise,
Not from the mud, but sterile skies.
They take our place, our thought, our role,
But lack the fire, the breath, the soul.
Yet all is not beyond repair—
She waits for us in mountain air.
Not with machines, but heart and limb,
We’ll heal the Earth grown pale and dim.
Bring back the parks where none may plow,
Let children learn by leaf and bough.
Let smell return, the oldest guide,
To lead us back to what we’ve denied.
O Bhoodevi, O Gaia torn,
By metal sons your womb is worn—
Yet in your breath, a song remains,
To cleanse this world of wires and chains.
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Let me know if you'd like this poem translated, stylized, or adapted into a
performance format or a song.
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