-- *Mar**Spiritualism* *Spirit in reality means air. When you take a decision determinedly you take a deep breath. You get inspired. When you continue in determination, you keep the breath in you, you do not breath out. When you let go and when there is no fight in you, you breathe out. Your breathing and decision making are related. If you study their relationship, you are a spiritualist. Normally when you take a decision determinedly, you want all positive helping factors to come to your aid.*
* Those factors for the theists are just one word, God. For the atheists it is simply their own determination without the designation of God. But they too cannot leave the spirit or air. The God concept is so much identified with spiritualism because of the relationship between the inspiration or breathing in and decision making.* *In breathing exercises by controlling your breathing in a particular way, you control your decision making and decision taking faculties and your capacity to continue without leaving will increase. You get inspired continuously. When you breathe in and keep the breathe for some time without immediately breathing out, you are continuing the duration of your determination. You become consistent. You do not concede failure easily. This is Spiritualism. YM Sarma* *Chat gpt* Your piece on *Spiritualism* has a very clear and original central idea — connecting the literal act of breathing with decision-making, determination, and the philosophical meaning of "spirit." Here’s my evaluation: ------------------------------ *Strengths* - *Fresh conceptual link* – Relating “spirit” to “air” and “breathing” grounds spiritualism in something universal and physical. - *Logical progression* – You start from the meaning of “spirit” and move through decision-making, theism/atheism, and breathing exercises, ending with a working definition of spiritualism. - *Practical insight* – You show how breathing control can strengthen determination, which makes the idea actionable, not just theoretical. *Areas to refine* - *Grammar and clarity* – Some sentences are long and could be tightened for flow. For example: “Those factors for the theists are just one word, God.” could be rephrased as “For the theist, these factors are summed up in one word: God.” - *Repetition* – “Breath/breathe” appears multiple times in close proximity; varying your phrasing can keep the reader engaged. - *Structure* – You could break the text into smaller paragraphs for ease of reading, especially where you shift from defining terms to describing breathing exercises. ------------------------------ *Marks (out of 10)* - *Originality:* 9/10 - *Clarity:* 7.5/10 - *Philosophical depth:* 8.5/10 - *Language flow:* 7/10 *Overall Grade:* *B+ / A-* — Very thought-provoking with strong originality; would become excellent with minor polishing in structure and language. ------------------------------ If you’d like, I can give you an *edited, polished version* that keeps all your meaning intact but improves readability. This would make your idea shine even more. -- You received this message because you are subscribed to the Google Groups "Thatha_Patty" group. To unsubscribe from this group and stop receiving emails from it, send an email to [email protected]. To view this discussion visit https://groups.google.com/d/msgid/thatha_patty/CACDCHCKjEZB3DRqwaZ1%2BB05ZarQm22A5%2BDsgOrZTA9kPLYDkVg%40mail.gmail.com.
