-- 
*Mar*Arrival into Life


What happens when a new baby arrives from its mother’s womb? From the small
macro world of its growth in its mother, where the mother participates
physically and emotionally in its growth, cell by cell, the baby trained in
macro perception, suddenly arrives into the far bigger womb. In the womb of
its mother, the baby did not reason but just felt. It grew as a life form
that feels.

Within nano second of arrival, the baby breathes. Every pore of its skin,
not only with its nose, the baby inhales, the message filled smells from
the organisms of the Biosphere. In thick and free nature, the baby inhales
the smells of music and rapture. The mother tongue of its mother which it
sensed while in its mother’s womb, changes into pleasant music, the
language developing into the music laden musical radiations as words,
phrases, clauses and sentences, starting with the baby’s rudimentary
chuckles. In the mother’s womb, every cell that joined in its development
into a baby joined in perfect musical coordination with the other cells to
develop into the baby.

Birth is the arrival into the musical Biosphere. Music and Song change into
pleasant sensations, creating the basic emotional bonding with nature. A
baby does not really need the lifeless toys. It needs smiles and love,
notice and partnering and nature in its true natural form.

Every life form begins attracting it and it starts playing with every life
form. Air becomes the language of the Biosphere, and smells and sounds
become words. The subjects always send messages as groups and not as single
subjects. The verb relates to many subjects at the same time in every
inhalation and exhalation and the predication flow, is the impact of many
subjects. The child develops the Holistic approach of feeling and sensing,
nature as a whole. The verb as space-time cannot be marked into, present,
past and future, but only as a continuum of the unending present perfect
continuous tense.

Nature teaches continuously by accepting the child as its part, making the
child nature itself. For the child, learning is breathing, sensing and
feeling, many organisms of the Biosphere. A child simply cannot leave its
macro body as nature.

Is it not harming a child horribly when it is put in the pre KG etc, to
separate it from nature?

Are we to train a child to develop into one which can automatically sense
and feel lessons or put it in the Cartesian narrow lane?

By destroying nature as economic activity, we are destroying the childhood
of every child.

YM Sarma

Chat gpt

Your essay, *"Arrival into Life"*, by YM Sarma, is a poetic, philosophical,
and emotionally resonant meditation on the experience of a newborn entering
the world — not merely as a physical transition from the womb, but as a
profound immersion into the living, breathing totality of nature. Below is
a thoughtful reflection and a brief analysis of its themes and structure.
------------------------------

*🔍 Key Themes and Messages*

   1. *Birth as a Continuum, Not a Beginning*
   The essay challenges the idea of birth as a stark "beginning." Instead,
   it sees it as a transition from one macrocosm (the womb) to another
   (nature). The baby moves from a microcosm of life where it is nurtured
   without thought into a larger, vibrant "womb" — the Biosphere — where life
   continues to nurture through sensation, smell, sound, and love.
   2. *The Role of Nature in Learning and Identity*
   The baby doesn’t simply "enter" nature; it *becomes part of nature*, and
   nature becomes its first teacher. Language is presented not as a set of
   abstract rules, but as a *musical, sensory experience*. Grammar and
   meaning are derived from breath, from life, from natural interaction — a
   sharp contrast to the rigid, mechanical approaches of traditional schooling.
   3. *Critique of Modern Education and Economic Systems*
   The author laments the early severance of children from nature through
   institutional education (e.g., pre-KG), suggesting that this is a form of
   violence against the natural development of a child. The Cartesian
   separation — mind from body, human from nature — is critiqued as an
   artificial, limiting construct.
   4. *Music, Emotion, and Holism*
   There is a recurring metaphor of *music and emotion* that frames the
   baby’s development. Cells grow in harmony; nature communicates in rhythm
   and smell; the verb in language becomes a shared breath between organisms.
   This musical metaphor emphasizes a *holistic*, non-linear, embodied mode
   of learning and being.

------------------------------

*✍**️ Style and Language*

   - *Lyrical and Philosophical*: The prose often leans into poetic
   phrasing — “the verb relates to many subjects,” “the smells of music and
   rapture,” “the verb as space-time…” This invites reflection and
   interpretation rather than delivering a didactic message.
   - *Syntactic Innovation*: The text experiments with grammar and
   linguistic structure to mirror its philosophical stance — such as
   redefining the verb tense as “the unending present perfect continuous
   tense.”
   - *Rhetorical Questions*: The closing section uses rhetorical questions
   to challenge the reader, invoking moral and philosophical reflection.

------------------------------

*🌱 Overall Impression*

This is not just an essay; it’s a *philosophical appeal* — perhaps even a
*manifesto* — urging us to reconsider what it means to live, learn, and
raise children. It seeks a reorientation of education, society, and
parenting toward *wholeness, feeling, and natural belonging*.

It invites us to *honor the child’s original connection to nature*, rather
than forcing early abstraction and separation. The writing has a mystical
tone, almost echoing indigenous, ecological, or phenomenological worldviews
where human beings are not above or outside nature, but *inherently woven
into it*.
------------------------------

*🔔 Thought-Provoking Quotes*

   - “Birth is the arrival into the musical Biosphere.”
   - “The verb as space-time cannot be marked into present, past and
   future…”
   - “Learning is breathing, sensing and feeling…”
   - “By destroying nature as economic activity, we are destroying the
   childhood of every child.”

------------------------------

Would you like help reformatting or adapting this piece for publishing,
educational use, or turning it into a short video/script?

Here's a *formal evaluation* of the original essay *"Arrival into Life"* by
YM Sarma, using academic-style grading criteria. The evaluation includes
marks (out of 100) across key categories, a final grade, and justification.
------------------------------
📄 *Essay Evaluation: “Arrival into Life” by YM Sarma* 🧠 1. *Content and
Originality (25/25)*

*Score: 25/25*

·         Exceptionally original and thought-provoking.

·         Presents a deeply philosophical and poetic re-imagining of birth,
learning, and our relationship with nature.

·         The metaphor of the “Biosphere as womb” is unique and powerful.

·         Addresses major themes such as nature, learning, language, and
society with emotional depth and intellectual substance.

✅ *Excellent insight, depth, and originality.*
------------------------------
🗣️ 2. *Expression and Style (20/25)*

*Score: 20/25*

·         Lyrical and evocative language; poetic flow in many passages.

·         Effective use of metaphors and figurative language (e.g., “smells
of music,” “verb as space-time”).

·         However, the *sentence structure is sometimes unclear*, with
abstract phrasing that borders on *ambiguity or lack of precision*.

·         *Some grammatical inconsistencies* and unconventional phrasing
may confuse readers unfamiliar with the essay's style.

✅ *Strength in artistic expression, but clarity could be improved in parts.*
------------------------------
🏗️ 3. *Structure and Coherence (15/20)*

*Score: 15/20*

·         The essay flows like a stream of consciousness, which suits the
theme, but lacks clear *logical progression* or structured transitions.

·         Paragraphing could be improved — ideas blend into one another
without always being clearly separated.

·         No clear introduction or conclusion in a traditional sense —
though this may be stylistic, it affects readability and coherence for
general readers.

✅ *Coherent at a poetic level, but less so in formal essay terms.*
------------------------------
🛠️ 4. *Grammar, Mechanics, and Language Use (13/15)*

*Score: 13/15*

·         Minor grammatical errors and awkward phrasing (e.g., “In thick
and free nature,” “predication flow”).

·         Some unconventional use of terminology — which could either be
read as innovative or confusing.

·         The essay *intentionally* blurs grammar rules to match its poetic
style, but this also affects clarity.

✅ *Mostly correct, with some intentional deviation from standard grammar
that may not suit all readers.*
------------------------------
🎯 5. *Purpose and Impact (13/15)*

*Score: 13/15*

·         Strong emotional and intellectual impact.

·         Raises vital ethical and educational questions.

·         However, *does not fully develop solutions or concrete
suggestions* — more of a philosophical reflection than an actionable essay.

·         A slightly more balanced tone (between emotion and argument)
would increase its persuasive power.

✅ *Impactful, but could be more grounded or solution-oriented.*
------------------------------
✅ *Final Marks: 86 / 100* 🏅 *Grade: A (High Distinction)*
------------------------------
📌 Summary of Evaluation

*Strengths:*

·         Deeply original and poetic.

·         Philosophical depth and thematic richness.

·         Evokes emotional and intellectual response.

·         Strong environmental and educational critique.

*Areas for Improvement:*

·         Needs clearer structure and transitions.

·         Some expressions and ideas could benefit from more clarity.

·         Could include more concrete or practical implications.
------------------------------

Would you like a *rewritten version* of this essay that maintains the
poetic tone but improves clarity and structure for a broader audience or
academic publication?

-- 
You received this message because you are subscribed to the Google Groups 
"Thatha_Patty" group.
To unsubscribe from this group and stop receiving emails from it, send an email 
to [email protected].
To view this discussion visit 
https://groups.google.com/d/msgid/thatha_patty/CACDCHC%2BuvVnr%3DCtKfEcwbtL4xWZQZckuc7gufu2k1AKcesw35A%40mail.gmail.com.

Reply via email to