-- 
*Mar*Thanks for sharing this—there’s a strong, passionate core here. I’ll
do two things, as you asked:

   1.

   *Give an edited and improved version* (clearer structure, smoother flow,
   tightened language, without changing your central ideas or voice).
   2.

   *Then give my views*—what works powerfully, and where the argument could
   be strengthened or clarified.

------------------------------
Edited and Improved Version

*Discovering the Language of the Biosphere*

We observe animals touching noses and understanding one another. For them,
smell is language. Today, that language has been severely damaged by
industrial, urban, and commercial pollution. There was a time when all
organisms, including humans, could smell and sense one another from a
distance. The air itself carried information. In such a world, deception
could scarcely be conceptualized in ordinary interaction, because the
air—laden with meaning—synchronized with the body’s internal hormonal
communications.

If a university were to establish a truly *Free Nature Park*, without any
tampering, students might begin to revive this shared, smell-based language
of the biosphere. Today, we see dog owners giving spoken commands to their
pets, and the dogs responding accurately. What is actually happening is not
linguistic comprehension in the human sense; rather, the dog senses the
emotional content behind the words. It translates human speech into its own
language of feeling. Through smell and subtle sensory perception, it
understands what is being communicated. In this way, it uses nature itself
to interpret commands. The sounds carried through the troposphere become
part of its emotional language.

The language of communication for every organism is emotional rather than
Cartesian. Their modes of communication are intimately linked with the
troposphere. When we enter a forest, we do not encounter a world dominated
by vocal words, but one guided by sensing. In a forest that is healthy,
complete, and free from human interference, the troposphere carries air
that enlivens organisms and triggers energetic, harmonious activity.

The universe itself is a single unit. Electromagnetism does not merely
travel; it vibrates. Our thoughts, perceptions, and understandings vibrate
outward from us. The vibration of each organism interacts with the
vibrations of others, collectively creating the macro-vibrations we
experience as nature.

Hearing, smelling, and sensing constitute the natural language of life—used
by every organism except, perhaps, modern humans. We have failed to notice
the profound harm caused by mechanization. When a machine performs the work
of a limb, the limb becomes inactive, blood circulation is reduced, and
hormonal communication is disrupted. This harm does not remain confined to
the individual. Every machine damages nature, disturbing the natural
macro-vibrations upon which all non-human organisms rely for perception,
understanding, and internal regulation.

If a university were to establish a Free Nature Park of at least fifty
square miles, the language of the biosphere—the shared language of all
organisms—could begin to re-emerge. If students learned this language
through feeling and sensing, they would receive a genuine education from
nature itself. Cartesianism and the mechanical paradigm have deeply damaged
natural education. Nature is the source of all education, and when that
source is continuously maimed by machines, education itself is destroyed.
Yet this destruction is dignified as economics, now the dominant discipline
in universities.

Every university must create a Free Nature Park, untouched and untampered,
so that the biosphere’s common language—rooted in nature’s vibrations—can
support real education. Today, business units have colonized universities,
representing perhaps the most insidious form of colonialism.

*—YM Sarma*
------------------------------
My ViewsWhat works very well

   -

   *The central intuition is powerful*: that life communicates primarily
   through sensing, emotion, and atmosphere rather than abstract symbols. This
   resonates with ecology, ethology, phenomenology, and even parts of
   neuroscience.
   -

   *The dog example is effective*. It grounds a large philosophical idea in
   everyday experience and makes the argument feel lived rather than abstract.
   -

   *Your critique of Cartesianism and mechanization* is consistent and
   passionate. You are clearly arguing for a worldview shift, not a policy
   tweak.
   -

   *The idea of a “Free Nature Park” as an educational space* is original
   and provocative. It reframes education as immersion rather than instruction.

Where it could be strengthened

   -

   *Clarify metaphor vs. mechanism*
   When you speak of “vibrations,” “electromagnetism,” and
   “macro-vibrations,” the language sometimes sounds scientific but operates
   philosophically or metaphorically. Some readers may push back unless you
   clearly signal that you are speaking phenomenologically, not making strict
   physical claims.
   -

   *Avoid absolute statements where nuance helps*
   Phrases like “every machine harms nature” or “humans alone do not use
   this language” are powerful rhetorically, but they invite easy dismissal. A
   small amount of nuance would make the argument harder to reject without
   weakening it.
   -

   *Sharpen the education critique*
   Your attack on economics and business colonizing universities is
   compelling, but brief. You might strengthen it by showing *how* this
   colonization specifically prevents sensory, ecological learning.

Overall take

This is not a conventional academic essay—it’s closer to a *manifesto or
ecological-philosophical meditation*. Its strength lies in vision, not
footnotes. If you present it as an invitation to rethink education,
language, and human place in nature—rather than as a literal scientific
account—it becomes much more persuasive and profound.

If you want, I can also:

   -

   Rewrite this for an *academic journal*,
   -

   Turn it into a *short manifesto*,
   -

   Or make a *gentler, more accessible version* for general readers.

Just tell me which direction you want to take it.

-- 
You received this message because you are subscribed to the Google Groups 
"Thatha_Patty" group.
To unsubscribe from this group and stop receiving emails from it, send an email 
to [email protected].
To view this discussion visit 
https://groups.google.com/d/msgid/thatha_patty/CACDCHC%2BEYng4WrRxtqMvNJS2D6BixdF7VC_m-dMrxChqibTQ8A%40mail.gmail.com.

Reply via email to