While cranking up the fall social psych syllabus, it occurred to me 
that folks on this might 1) like to use bits of this for their own 
and 2) give me useful feedback on it.  This is a web page I refer 
people to regarding what I want in a paper.

-Chuck

What "Please give more detail" means

Students are often frustrated when I mark their papers "please give 
more detail." I admit the comment doesn't tell you much about what 
sort of detail I would like to see (but it does fit in the margin 
nicely). Here is a guide to the kinds of ways one can add "detail" to 
a paper without simply repeating yourself.

Allan Bloom has posited a "taxonomy of educational objectives" that 
helps us discriminate different kinds of detail. Underneath each of 
these sorts of detail, I give an explanation of it and an example. 
Each single example sentence would never stand by itself in a paper, 
but represents what might be the topic sentence of a paragraph. Stuff 
towards the top of this list is detail that is less impressive than 
stuff towards the bottom.

Knowledge: Recognition of a concept and ability to define it. 
"Conformity is the change in a person's behavior brought about by the 
real or imagined presence of others." This definition suggests 
knowledge that the concept "conformity" can be described in a 
particular way. Giving more than one definition does not add to 
knowledge, unless comparisons are made between them. Giving a simple 
example can be a form of definition too. Simple examples suggest 
knowledge, and some comprehension, complex ones suggest application.

Comprehension: Clear evidence that the nuance of knowledge is 
recognized. The ability to use a concept in a sentence toward some 
end is also evidence of comprehension. "Persuasion is a kind of 
social influence with a slightly different approach than that of 
conformity." Comprehension is more than awareness of a simple 
definition, it also involves the ability to understand the meaning of 
a concept and use it appropriately.

Application: The use of a concept to understand a complex real-world 
problem. A simple example is not an application. Application requires 
the use of the concept in a careful and thoughtful manner, in a 
manner that takes into account the complexity of both the concept and 
the situation. "Conformity in the Challenger disaster took on various 
forms, depending upon the relation of the decision maker to positions 
of power."

Analysis: This involves the ability to understand the internal 
structure of a concept and to manipulate that structure to show how 
the concept is put together. "Conformity can take on several 
different aspects (compliance, identification, internalization) but 
these aspects are not as easy to separate as the simple list 
suggests; they flow into each other and even transform each other at 
times." Just showing the connections or structure is the beginning, 
but manipulating the structure to show its flexibility or fragility 
is deeper analysis.

Synthesis: Taking two or more concepts and showing their 
similarities, differences, contrasts, contradictions, or 
combinations. "Some prejudice is really a form of conformity, or is 
at least motivated by a desire to fit in." Again, showing the 
contrast is just the beginning; you can also show why it matters, or 
how it can be resolved, or why it is interesting (see Analysis)

Evaluation: Is this concept up to the task its designers' set for it? 
Where does it fall short? What does it leave out? What implications 
does it have for other concepts or issues? If it is useful for one 
purpose, might it be useful for other, similar purposes? "Conformity 
can easily be over-applied to explain almost any social decision; 
perhaps this is because its definition is too vague."

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