Hi Mel, On Wed, Mar 24, 2010 at 00:39, Mel Chua <m...@redhat.com> wrote: > Okay, these words aren't coming out quite right, but here's a v.1.0. > Patches extremely welcome.
I can submit a patch later today. The reason: your first paragraph is all background, and ends with a rhetorical question. You want your reader to know, in the first sentence or two, that you are advertising a workshop for faculty. The details of why (and why they want to be part of it) can then follow. Your second paragraph, with a slightly modified first sentence, gets right into the point of the email quickly. That might serve as a better starting point. Patch forthcoming... Cheers, Matt > http://teachingopensource.org/index.php/HOWTO_plan_a_POSSE#POSSE_announcement_email _______________________________________________ tos mailing list tos@teachingopensource.org http://teachingopensource.org/mailman/listinfo/tos
