Matt, thanks for your review. I have entered a No Objection ballot. Alissa
> On Mar 8, 2018, at 1:59 AM, Matthew Miller <[email protected]> > wrote: > > Reviewer: Matthew Miller > Review result: Ready with Nits > > I am the assigned Gen-ART reviewer for this draft. The General Area > Review Team (Gen-ART) reviews all IETF documents being processed > by the IESG for the IETF Chair. Please treat these comments just > like any other last call comments. > > For more information, please see the FAQ at > > <https://trac.ietf.org/trac/gen/wiki/GenArtfaq>. > > Document: draft-ietf-trill-over-ip-15 > Reviewer: Matthew A. Miller > Review Date: 2018-03-07 > IETF LC End Date: 2018-03-06 > IESG Telechat date: 2018-03-08 > > Summary: Ready with nits > > Major issues: NONE > > Minor issues: NONE > > Nits/editorial comments: > > * In Section 4.5. "TRILL Over IP Transport IS-IS SubNetwork Point > of Attachment", the word "of" between "" > > """ > The Hellos transmitted out [of] a port indicate what neighbor ports > that port can see on the link by listing what IS-IS refers to as the > neighbor port's SubNetwork Point of Attachment (SNPA) > """ > > * In Section 5.2. "Encapsulation Agreement", the first sentence is > difficult to understand; I think it is missing the word "on" between > "sent out" and "a TRILL over IP": > > """ > TRILL Hellos sent out [on] a TRILL over IP transport port indicate the > encapsulations for which that port is offering full support through a > mechanism initially specified in [RFC7178] and [RFC7176] that is > hereby extended. > """ > > * In Section 5.4. "Native Encapsulation", the word "he" should be > "the" in the sentence "Where he UDP Header is as follows". > > * In Section 5.6.1. "TCP Connection Establishment", the word > "connections" should be singular (or the leading "a" dropped) in the > fragment "try to establish a TCP connections to each of them". > > * In Section 5.6.1. "TCP Connection Establishment", the occurrence of > "P!" should be changed to "P1". > > _______________________________________________ > Gen-art mailing list > [email protected] > https://www.ietf.org/mailman/listinfo/gen-art _______________________________________________ trill mailing list [email protected] https://www.ietf.org/mailman/listinfo/trill
