On Tue, 2009-04-21 at 21:43 -0400, John Baer wrote: > I created a mockup of a revised Artwork Team wiki page for your > consideration. > > https://wiki.ubuntu.com/JohnBaer/SandBox
"Our interests are not only in creating graphics (...)" I'd prefer "artwork" over "graphics" here. A bit broader. "The aim is to enrich Ubuntu by creating high quality artistic submissions (...)" Too complicated, better "by creating high quality artwork" Submissions are part of the process, not something we deliver as such. "The process is agile as we tend to work in self forming small groups and collaborate with other teams. Those who have a strong vision of the outcome often assume a leadership role depending on others to assist as we strive to achieve a polished cohesive look." Excellent. Could be shortened by starting at the "We". "The pace is fast, the challenges hard, and the rewards satisfying." Sounds dubious to me. Better drop this sentence. I really welcome your effort of spicing things up with graphics, but the usshop photos make me cringe. I associate this look with cheap and dumb advertising, but maybe that's just me? Using bitmaps to have a special font is problematic, as it is not feasible to do that everywhere. I'd rather be boring but consistent in that aspect. I wouldn't list the artwork categories there on the front page, but just have that link to Incoming/Karmic. Ressources in that place is nice for the flow, but bad for frequent users of our Wiki. The "Get Involved" section is very well done, but please drop "Membership is open, all opinions are valued, and everyone is welcomed." The first is redundant given the sentence right before. "all opinions are valued" is not true, unless you value "I don't like that", "more orange" and "+1" all standing alone. "everyone is welcome" is also not true, there are requirements of at least half-way decent behaviour, if nothing else. For "Flavors of Ubuntu", I would put the candy inside the logo outline, not in the middle. With https://wiki.ubuntu.com/JohnBaer/SandBox/Backgrounds there's once again the problem of duplication. But lets clear the front page before we discuss that. -- Thorsten Wilms thorwil's design for free software: http://thorwil.wordpress.com/ -- ubuntu-art mailing list [email protected] https://lists.ubuntu.com/mailman/listinfo/ubuntu-art
