There is a difference between "dumbing down" and writing clearly and concisely 
so that one's idea is clear.  What you wrote previously may have been clear to 
you, but what was in your brain did not get transferred to the wording in the 
email.  It is not desirable to use phrases like "dumbing down" when it is your 
lack of clarity that brought about Kyle's and anybody else's response.

I do it myself.  Sometimes when I read what I wrote, I realize that my writing 
was clear to me, but not in the execution.  It is dirty pool to put people down 
for what amounts to your lack of clarity.
Sande Knight
  ----- Original Message ----- 
  From: UNIVERSITY*CITOYEN<mailto:[EMAIL PROTECTED]> 
  To: University City List<mailto:[email protected]> 
  Sent: Saturday, March 17, 2007 2:18 PM
  Subject: Re: [UC] Re: Why does the state store want to move


  Kyle Cassidy wrote:

  > If you're going to complain people are speculating, stop
  > asking people who don't know. Nobody on this list can do
  > ANYTHING BUT speculate about this. Nobody on this list
  > owns the liquor store and nobody on this list is the
  > regional manager for Rite Aid.
  > 
  > Call the PLCB and ask them why they want to move their
  > store. Or stop in the store and ask the manager.
  > 
  > Then let us know what they say. Until then, you're not
  > going to get anything but speculation. Ask the people who
  > know, not the people who it's convenient to ask.



  I'm not complaining.

  here, I'll dumb it down:

  so far in the news (the dp, uc review) the liquor store move 
  has been presented in terms of community participation and 
  debate, as a public question being publicly deliberated.

  and in that same press we hear owner deritis speaking for 
  the plcb -- as both the developer for the plan and as a 
  'community leader'. we hear plcb officials not commenting on 
  the move and then later denying the move (twice). we then 
  hear that deritis is unavailable for comment.

  and I am questioning what the press is presenting as 
  'community participation' and 'debate.'

  is that clearer? I'm not complaining, I'm not taking sides. 
  I'm questioning the process.

  to dumb it down even further:

  the question is being framed as a public choice between A or 
  B. I'm asking how are A and B public options? are they 
  options of our making? our only options? our best options?

  surely you can appreciate what's at stake here, kyle, since 
  you yourself are so personally interested in what the 
  mayorial candidates are going to do about all the recent 
  bigfoot sightings!



  ..................
  UNIVERSITY*CITOYEN
  [aka laserbeam®]
  [aka ray]
  SERIAL LIAR. CALL FOR RATES.


































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