Posted by Eugene Volokh:
More on <a
href="http://volokh.com/archives/archive_2004_12_00.shtml#1101930018";>Verve</a>:
I was revising an old draft, and came across this sentence:
The problems of yesterday will not recur in exactly the same way
tomorrow, but they may recur in related ways.
Blecch; all those prepositional phrases, the needless abstraction and
complexity of the "way"'s, and even the slight fustiness of "recur"
leach the life out of that sentence. A bit of work produced:
Tomorrow's problems won't be identical to yesterday's; but they may
be similar enough.
Not perfect, and I'm not sure how great a minor sentence like this can
be. But better than the original, I think.
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