Hi, Jaclyn,

looks like a fun client, and you have some nice graphic ideas working.
My two cents' worth--take or leave with my blessing.

1. The light-on-dark text is optically very active. Look at the mailing list
page. Compare the text in the form (dark on light) with the white-on-dark
blue of the body text. Let your eyes go back and forth between the two
areas, not reading the text, but just taking in the entire text area at
once. Notice how the area with the white-on-dark text tends to sort of dance
and strobe in your vision. The dark on light text is soooooo much easier on
the eyes. If you really like the light-on-dark look, here are some things
you can do to make the body text less optically active: a) increase the
leading (line height) for the body text, and/or reduce the text size
slightly b) reduce slightly the contrast between text and background. That
is, make the text a light grey or tan instead of stark white. Play with the
color 'til you have sufficient contrast to read easily, but not so much that
it's optically active. A slightly heavier font or font weight may also help.
Again, on the same page, look at the orange text in the animation--notice
how much less optically active it is than the body text.
Suggested reading (you may know him already): Edward Tufte, "Envisioning
Information" and other books.

Similarly, the white lines above and below the head graphic, and around the
logo--because they contrast in value (light/dark) so greatly with the
background, they stand out far more than their visual importance would
merit. I would remove them, or screen them back heavily (darken them to some
color that doesn't contrast so violently with the background).

2. I think the design may be breaking slightly on the home (what's on) page.
I'm on Windows2000, IE 6. The top two rounded rectangles are breaking up
around the titles. There are also some typographic inconsistencies (font
weight of the orange titles)
Beyond that -- to me, the orange rectangles, including the orange graphic at
the bottom, are not needed, detract from the content they contain, and are
making your life unnecessarily difficult. They also point a neon arrow at
the alignment of the large elements of the layout--look at the bottom of the
blocks for the first two plays--without the orange lines and graphics, one
simply sees one text block with less text than the other. With the orange,
one sees two graphics elements that look as though they want to align, but
are failing to.
Also: in each of the play listings, the boldface orange title is sort of
fighting for attention with the same title, duplicated in white boldface
below. Suggest you remove the orange titles currently on top, and make the
existing white titles below orange instead. I guarantee each listing will
have greater visual impact!

a tip-- look at your layouts from across the room--from far enough away to
see the layout instead of the individual words and graphics. What stands out
at that distance is what you are giving visual weight to, intentionally or
not. Viewed from across the room, in your layout, the bright orange and
white lines would seem to be very important--the contrast makes them carry
so much visual weight. When you screen them back, the logo and content will
stand out better.

yours,
Elliott Stewart
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