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Thanks for the review. I think the editorial comments and the un-expanded initialisms are not controversial. The text in section 4.1 contains our hard-earned consensus about maximum max-age. Perhaps your comment about section 2.1.1 can be accommodated by pointing to section 4.1 from section 2.1.1. As for the rest, I will leave up to the group, but I might also comment as an individual. To the WebSec group: please send in comments about this. A GenArt review (just like *Dir reviews that are likely to come in the next few days) should be addressed just like any other comments. Pushing back is fine if we think they are inappropriate, but comments about lack of clarity tend to be correct when they’re made by someone outside the working group - someone who reads the document without having participated in the discussion on-list and at meetings. Making changes is still up to the working group, so please go over Elwyn’s comments. Yoav As co-chair and document shepherd. On Jul 31, 2014, at 4:05 PM, Elwyn Davies <[email protected]> wrote: > I am the assigned Gen-ART reviewer for this draft. For background on > Gen-ART, please see the FAQ at > > <http://wiki.tools.ietf.org/area/gen/trac/wiki/GenArtfaq>. > > Please resolve these comments along with any other Last Call comments > you may receive. > > Document: draft-ietf-websec-key-pinning-19.txt > Reviewer: Elwyn Davies > Review Date: 31 July 2014 > IETF LC End Date: 1 August 2014 > IESG Telechat date: (if known) - > > Summary: > Almost ready. There are some minor issues some of which may be as a result > of some > misunderstanding on my part. The descriptive text in the early part of s2 is > missing > some definitions that make it unclear until they appear later on. This makes > the early > descriptions more confusing that illuminating in places. Suggestions in the > detailed > comments below. > > One thing that is not fully clear to me and could probably be explained to > help others > is the start up of the pinning mechanisms for a given host domain. AFAICS > Pin validation > would possibly not be carried out on a first connection to a domain when > there are no > preconfigured Pins. I am not clear if this adds anything to the risk of a > MITM attack or > does it in any way negate the value of the whole pinning process? I was not > clear if > an effective Pin validation should be carried out during the first connection > when the > UA receives the host's Pins for the first time and decides that it is now a > Pinned Host, > in that the document doesn't state that the connection is terminated if the > setting up > of the Pinned host fails because the certs don't validate. > > Major issues: > None > > Minor issues: > s1: The term "Pin" (as a noun) is not explicitly defined. The definition > doesn't appear > until s2.4. > > s2.1.1: I'm not sure if this could be an issue.. should a maximum possible > value for max_age > be specified to avoid UA's being cluttered up with old Pins - this might > possible be a DoS > attack vehicle but I am not sure (yet) if it could be. OK.. so s2.3.3 talks > about limits. > A pointer to this discussion would be useful here > > s2.2.1: Does this response behaviour apply to all possible request types? > Once a server has sent a > Pin header should it send it again on all subsequent requests on the same TLS > connection or is > that a choice? Given the "SHOULD" in s2.2.1, what are the circumstances in > which the server should > refrain from sending the Pins? [I first thought about 'Redirects' but > realized that that was probably > a really good time to send Pins!] > > s2.3.1/s2.4: S2.4 states that hash algorithms might be deprecated in future. > Presumably a > deprecated algorithm should be treated as an unrecognized directive or some > such to avoid > downgrade attacks. Probably worth being explicit about this. Also this is > potentially > incompatible with the statement that 'UAs MUST recognize "sha256"' (Para 3 of > s2.4). > This results in a potential downgrade attack when and if SHA256 is deemed to > be no longer > cryptographically effective. I think this statement can be removed as > presently a UA > has no other option if it is to implement the specification. > > s2.6: >> Note that the UA MUST perform Pin Validation when setting up the TLS >> session, before beginning an HTTP conversation over the TLS channel. > I suspect I am confused: If a UA is making its first connection to a host for > which it doesn't > have a preconfigured Pin, then it won't get the Pin(s) from the host until it > has set up the > TLS connection and received the response to the request at the HTTP protocol > level. In that case > Pin validation will pass by default (subject to local policy perhaps) since > the cache doesn't have > entries for the host. Presumably the UA should then perform Pin validation > if it has passed by > default during TLS setup (assuming that this is possible given the layering) > or does the UA have to > terminate the session and restart it so that Pin validation can be performed? > The second case may > give scope for a DoS attack. Or is it the case that Pin validation is not > needed on the first > connection... I don't see why this shouldn't be done but I may not understand > the problem. I think > some clarification about the startup of the process is needed. > Nits/editorial comments: > > s1, last para: s/toegether/together/, s/but is possible/but it is possible/ > s2.1: It would be good to expand the term OWS. > > s2.1, Figure 1 caption: The acronym HPKP needs expanding. > > s2.1, 2nd para after numbered bullets: > It is not the definition of hash algorithms that is relevant, but allowing > them to be > used in pin-directives thus: > OLD: > additional algorithms may be defined in the future > NEW: > additional algorithms may be allowed for use in this context in future > > Also the implication of the "sha256" name should be explained precisely - > i.e, that the SHA256 hash algorithm will be used, and a suitable reference > for SHA256 should be given. (Again this doesn't happen until s2.4). > > And finally the "Fingerprint" of what SPKI? Defining Pin formally as noted > above would help! > > s2.1, last para: s/hahs/hash/ > > s4.2/Figure 8: The first line of text is too wide. > > s5, para 1: Is it really "HSTS or HPKP"? I thought it would be "HSTS > combined with HPKP". > > s6: Needs to be more precise about *which* message headers repository is to > be updated! Presumably > the permanent one at > http://www.iana.org/assignments/message-headers/message-headers.xml#perm-headers. > > Also there may be some of the questions in s8.3.1 of RFC 7231 that need > specific answers. > > s5, 2nd top level bullet: Expand SNI acronym. > _______________________________________________ websec mailing list [email protected] https://www.ietf.org/mailman/listinfo/websec
