michelle olson wrote: > Hi Mark, > > Thanks for your time to feedback, my replies inline. > > Mark Martin wrote: >> On Tue, Jan 20, 2009 at 7:33 PM, Michelle Olson <[email protected]> >> wrote: >> >>> Hi all, >>> >>> I've drafted a feature spot for the test community here: >>> >>> http://opensolaris.org/os/project/website/content/home_page_draft_24 >>> >>> Let me know what you think. >>> >> >> My impressions, if I may... >> >> - The picture is nice, but I'm not sure if it conveys anything. Most >> of the graphics up till now have conveyed a particular style, and now >> we have this picture. Actually, that may not be so bad, but it looks >> like a small group of computers, and downplays the fact that there are >> more resources available (virtualization = lots and lots and lots). >> Is there a "Cabinet 02" or a "OSTF02?" I dunno, could just be me. >> > > Probably not just you, the first graphic is usually scrapped in early > feature spot reviews, this is likely no exception :) I try to mix it > up (graphics, screenshots, photos) to keep it interesting, so I > started with a photo for this one since we've had a few weeks of > illustrations. Let me know if you've seen something that conveys > something more and I'll add it to the draft, meantime I'll poke around > for a better one.
I've slept on it. I'm switching my vote to keeping the picture. You're right, it's a change of pace. > >> - I'm not sure, but does "many resources including" need a colon? Or >> maybe a mix of semi colons because aren't the first three items also a >> sublist? >> > > Good catch, I've added a colon and separated into two sentences, let > me know if you think it is better/worse. Works for me but I struggled with English classes in school. No lye. On second look, though, I think the last part should be "..repositories, *and* a self-service....". > >> - The last sentence seems a big over the top. "High Quality" >> conversation? It's clever, but is it too much? He who would pick a >> pun... Those QA folk, always wise-cracking. I dunno, could just be >> me. I'm just wondering if something different could be said to end >> strongly. >> > > Yes, you are right, if I'm stuck or it is late in the day, I often > write something cheeky and just get it out for review, warts and all. > I like your suggestion below, so I've added it to the current draft, > let me know what you think. I like the flow a little better. Visually and semantically. _______________________________________________ website-discuss mailing list [email protected]
