It's a poem, in need of editing. Where are the silences? Why are there redundencies? Nice start.
AJ --- Thomas savage <[EMAIL PROTECTED]> wrote: > Poem or Song? > > Ain't she sweet? > It ain't necessarily so. > Tell it to me confidentially > So I may spread it abroad. > Your ending surprised me > In that all of us went on. > Open-ended and closed simultaneously. > The boat dances > To the waves' strut. > As the tempo picks up > We slow down to it > Long enough to allow > Some great silences between us. > Two sister churches wiggle in the distance. __________________________________ Yahoo! FareChase: Search multiple travel sites in one click. http://farechase.yahoo.com
