Dear sandeep,
 
I think this has too many cliche words in it, ie:
 
gutwrenching
unrequited (passion)
burning (passion)
 
You start thinking of Mills & Boon or women's magazine stories....
 
sorry, it just set my teeth on edge.
Can you find another way of expressing these emotions?
 
Jane

sandeep pendse <[EMAIL PROTECTED]> wrote:

the colours

questionable

questioning

purple and red

gut wrenching

passions - unrequited

and passions - burning

colours

purple and red

pining for pastels cool

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