On Dec 25, 2010, at 2:31 AM, Tom Davies wrote: > Hi :) > > I have a few suggestions but how close is this to completion? Note that it > is > always easier to criticise than to create. I think the advert is good work > despite these points ... > > 1. Are those well-known legs? If not then a sexy girl's legs/ankles are > likely > to be more attractive. Ignore this comment if this advert is part of a set > that > aims at diversity and are likely to be displayed fairly near each other. This is stock photo. > > 2. The word "hole" has quite a few strongly negative connotations in > english/american and not many good ones. "Full of holes" = lots of problems. > > The phrase "instant fail" is beginning to take over from that phrase but it > is > still in common usage. If you don't like someone or think they have done > something fairly bad you might call them an "ass-hole", "total [ass] hole" > etc. > To mitigate against that presumably this is due to be released at about the > start of a famous golf tournament? If not then can we replace it and keep > this > one ready to roll out when their is one? I tried adding w to make it "whole" > = > complete or good (a suggestion of fresh baked bread) also "whole in one" is > vaguely bhuddist/zen or something? See attached gif. Good point. I was going for the idea that you can spend less time at work and more time at play. > > 3. The paragraph at the bottom was almost right-justified but not quite and > the > 2nd line was strangely spaced away from the first line in a way that looked > accidental. See attached gif. I can fix this. > > 4. The shading at bottom-right seems to end quite abruptly. Is it possible > to > smudge it down or give the reflection a similar (but much lighter) shadow > that > fades? I tried but i'm pretty hopeless at picture editing. I guess this has > been tried and didn't work? > > 5. The wording "the spreadsheet you've always wanted" is a blatant lie. A > false > retrospective. Anyway we are the future rather than the past. How about > something like "the spreadsheet you will find you've always needed", hmm, > tricky. It is more words and might not fit so well. The 4th line being > "advanced functions." was superb, the extra "of" spoils that a little, sorry. > > > > 6. I guess the "With" looks dumb in italics? > > 7. I really like the blocks of words. On the right we have "always, > professional data, [comprehensive] range". On the left it's pretty good too > with the "advanced functions". If this is going to be in magazines or on > billboards then people might only see part of it at a time. The parts are > excellent :) > > If it is ready to go then ignore my comments as what we have compares > favourably > with the type of thing we see out there from competitors. Give me any advert > from anyone's running campaign and i could almost always pick more holes in > it > than i have with the Calc one. > Good luck and regards from > Tom :)
Thanks Tom. ;) > > > > > > > ________________________________ > From: Dave Johnson <davefilms...@gmail.com> > To: marketing@libreoffice.org; market...@us.libreoffice.org > Cc: Florian Effenberger <flo...@documentfoundation.org> > Sent: Sat, 25 December, 2010 6:35:57 > Subject: [libreoffice-marketing] LibO advert #2 with link > > http://www.davefilms.us/libreoffice/LibO_advert_12_24_2010.pdf > -- > Unsubscribe instructions: E-mail to marketing+h...@libreoffice.org > List archive: http://listarchives.libreoffice.org/www/marketing/ > *** All posts to this list are publicly archived for eternity *** > > > > -- > Unsubscribe instructions: E-mail to marketing+h...@libreoffice.org > List archive: http://listarchives.libreoffice.org/www/marketing/ > *** All posts to this list are publicly archived for eternity *** -- Unsubscribe instructions: E-mail to marketing+h...@libreoffice.org List archive: http://listarchives.libreoffice.org/www/marketing/ *** All posts to this list are publicly archived for eternity ***