RE: FLUXLIST: Jack A. Withers Smote poem
fourteen linesRoger Stevens [EMAIL PROTECTED] wrote:I dont wish to be pedantic (or maybe I do)Or maybe Im missing somethingBut this doesnt bear any relation to a sonnet-Original Message- From: [EMAIL PROTECTED] [mailto:[EMAIL PROTECTED] On Behalf Of John M. Bennett Sent: 17 November 2005 21:07 To: [EMAIL PROTECTED] Subject: FLUXLIST: Jack A. Withers Smote poemSmote sent me this, seems he's trying out my recent "sonnet" form:Whip With the sardines of your neighbors those very pretty plastic balls like hosers on the shore strong models of your jungle verbiage in the cellphone lakeLick every entityOrgan hand and legless jokes some jackoff zoo with puddles of cough syrup you stirred the long mud clues and stacked gum smokes, the eggless hands and doormenLentils heavy dickCake dome hell on the swim curbbages bumbled glove your yodels snore the bomb closers petting every wall in spastic clothes: oh neighing floor of hard beans: the whip! Jack A. Withers SmoteAfter Blaster Al Ackermans The Sardines of Your Neighbors __ Dr. John M. Bennett Curator, Avant Writing Collection Rare Books Manuscripts Library The Ohio State University Libraries 1858 Neil Av Mall Columbus, OH 43210 USA(614) 292-3029 [EMAIL PROTECTED] www.johnmbennett.net ___ Yahoo! Music Unlimited - Access over 1 million songs. Try it free.
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I was neglecting that particular meter, fine and noble as it is Roger, shame on you! Water meter it is too. Smells nice as well, perhaps it's a scenty meter? alan Oh Odin's Underpants its a B(owman)LOG http://bowmansramblings.blogspot.com/ Visit the Freeformfreakout Organisation Online: http://www.freeformfreakoutorganisation.net
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A masterful analysis For me it has become another poem entirely It's a blog! http://rogerstevens.blogspot.com Wonky Finger - Live at Staplecroft Village Hall Order your copy at http://www.rabbitpress.com Visit The Poetry Zone http://www.poetryzone.co.uk -Original Message- From: [EMAIL PROTECTED] [mailto:[EMAIL PROTECTED] On Behalf Of suse Sent: 20 November 2005 02:13 To: FLUXLIST@scribble.com Subject: Re: RE: FLUXLIST: Jack A. Withers Smote poem using: iambic, anapestic, trochaic, dactylic, spondaic, pyrrhic and forgoing: amphi anti bacchi, chori crete and epi Whip lick every entity: Lentils' heavy dick --Jack A. Withers Smote With the sardines of your neighbors-spondee, iamb, iamb, trochee-8-a those very pretty plastic balls like-dactyl, spondee, spondee, spondee-9-b hosers on the shore strong models of your-spondee, spondee, spondee, trocheel, trochee-10-a jungle verbiage in the cellphone lake-trochee, dactyl, anapest, dactyl-10-slnted b Organ hand and legless jokes some-trochee, spndee, trochee, spondee-8-c jackoff zoo with puddles of cough syrup you-Pyrric, iamb, trochee, iamb, trochee-11-d stirred the long mud clues and stacked-trochee, trochee, trochee, bum--7-imbed? (in bed?) gum smokes, the eggless hands and doormen-spondee, iamb, dactyl, spondee--9-slnt c Cake dome hell on the swim curbbage's bumbled-trochee, trochee, iamb, dactyl.. spondee-11-e glove your yodels snore the bomb closers-trochee, trochee, dactyl, spondee-9-slant b petting every wall in spastic clothes: oh, spondee, spondee, spondee, spondee, spon--dee-10-(slant ac) neighing floor of hard beans: the whip!-anapest, anapest, Iamb!-8-f After Blaster Al Ackerman's ---spndee--spondee--iamb, spondee-8g The Sardines of Your Neighbors---iamb, iamb, dactyl-7-a From this primitive and limited scansion I'd say it is close to a Shakespearean sonnett. A few beats added for pause or swallowed syllables and it's pert near solid, strange rhymees, but gallop it does --and surely it rhymes internally. The scansion reflects, of course, subjective reading -- I am fondee of the spondee. tee hee. there are a few other feet in there--which i forwent? A right nice smote poem I'd say. O! I gave a readingand it was grand--read with Matt Derby--check him out! suse - Original Message - From: michael leigh [EMAIL PROTECTED] To: FLUXLIST@scribble.com Sent: Saturday, November 19, 2005 5:11 PM Subject: RE: RE: FLUXLIST: Jack A. Withers Smote poem Neglecting the meter will not affect your gas supply but poems will be charged for every therm used . Therm more than others. Michael --- Roger Stevens [EMAIL PROTECTED] wrote: Of course I was neglecting that particular meter, fine and noble as it is Silly me It's a blog! http://rogerstevens.blogspot.com Wonky Finger - Live at Staplecroft Village Hall Order your copy at http://www.rabbitpress.com Visit The Poetry Zone http://www.poetryzone.co.uk -Original Message- From: [EMAIL PROTECTED] [mailto:[EMAIL PROTECTED] On Behalf Of JOHN BENNETT Sent: 19 November 2005 14:16 To: FLUXLIST@scribble.com Subject: Re: RE: FLUXLIST: Jack A. Withers Smote poem These are Johnee sonnets, written in Johnee meter etc! John Dr. John M. Bennett Curator, Avant Writing Collection Rare Books Manuscripts Library The Ohio State University Libraries 1858 Neil Av Mall Columbus, OH 43210 USA (614) 292-3029 [EMAIL PROTECTED] www.johnmbennett.net - Original Message - From: Roger Stevens [EMAIL PROTECTED] Date: Friday, November 18, 2005 1:07 pm Subject: RE: FLUXLIST: Jack A. Withers Smote poem Okay - the two short lines are released to float amidst the three quatrains. fine And the ends of the lines rhyme, in a relaxed way - in the Shakespeareanstyle actually - But what about the meter and the rhythm? Answer me that! It's a blog! target=lhttp://rogerstevens.blogspot.com http://rogerstevens.blogspot.com Wonky Finger - Live at Staplecroft Village Hall Order your copy at target=lhttp://www.rabbitpress.com http://www.rabbitpress.com Visit The Poetry Zone http://www.poetryzone.co.uk target=lhttp://rogerstevens.blogspot.com -Original Message- From: [EMAIL PROTECTED] [EMAIL PROTECTED] On Behalf Of John M. Bennett Sent: 18 November 2005 15:16 To: FLUXLIST@scribble.com Subject: RE: FLUXLIST: Jack A. Withers Smote poem Uh, it is a sonnet unless you define sonnet in strictly narrow terms, as being only a Shakespearean or Petrarchan. This is one of Bennett'ssonnet forms, as seen by Smote. But it's got the 14 lines, 3 quatrains, and a couplet consisting of the 2 short lines
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another W.S. XXIX. When, in disgrace with fortune and men's eyes, I all alone beweep my outcast state And trouble deaf heaven with my bootless cries And look upon myself and curse my fate, Wishing me like to one more rich in hope, Featured like him, like him with friends possess'd, Desiring this man's art and that man's scope, With what I most enjoy contented least; Yet in these thoughts myself almost despising, Haply I think on thee, and then my state, Like to the lark at break of day arising From sullen earth, sings hymns at heaven's gate; For thy sweet love remember'd such wealth brings That then I scorn to change my state with kings. query Mr. Withers Smote: would you consider exchanging yet for cake based on this reading? - Original Message - From: Roger Stevens [EMAIL PROTECTED] To: FLUXLIST@scribble.com Sent: Sunday, November 20, 2005 6:31 AM Subject: RE: RE: FLUXLIST: Jack A. Withers Smote poem A masterful analysis For me it has become another poem entirely It's a blog! http://rogerstevens.blogspot.com Wonky Finger - Live at Staplecroft Village Hall Order your copy at http://www.rabbitpress.com Visit The Poetry Zone http://www.poetryzone.co.uk -Original Message- From: [EMAIL PROTECTED] [mailto:[EMAIL PROTECTED] On Behalf Of suse Sent: 20 November 2005 02:13 To: FLUXLIST@scribble.com Subject: Re: RE: FLUXLIST: Jack A. Withers Smote poem using: iambic, anapestic, trochaic, dactylic, spondaic, pyrrhic and forgoing: amphi anti bacchi, chori crete and epi Whip lick every entity: Lentils' heavy dick --Jack A. Withers Smote With the sardines of your neighbors-spondee, iamb, iamb, trochee-8-a those very pretty plastic balls like-dactyl, spondee, spondee, spondee-9-b hosers on the shore strong models of your-spondee, spondee, spondee, trocheel, trochee-10-a jungle verbiage in the cellphone lake-trochee, dactyl, anapest, dactyl-10-slnted b Organ hand and legless jokes some-trochee, spndee, trochee, spondee-8-c jackoff zoo with puddles of cough syrup you-Pyrric, iamb, trochee, iamb, trochee-11-d stirred the long mud clues and stacked-trochee, trochee, trochee, bum--7-imbed? (in bed?) gum smokes, the eggless hands and doormen-spondee, iamb, dactyl, spondee--9-slnt c Cake dome hell on the swim curbbage's bumbled-trochee, trochee, iamb, dactyl.. spondee-11-e glove your yodels snore the bomb closers-trochee, trochee, dactyl, spondee-9-slant b petting every wall in spastic clothes: oh, spondee, spondee, spondee, spondee, spon--dee-10-(slant ac) neighing floor of hard beans: the whip!-anapest, anapest, Iamb!-8-f After Blaster Al Ackerman's ---spndee--spondee--iamb, spondee-8g The Sardines of Your Neighbors---iamb, iamb, dactyl-7-a From this primitive and limited scansion I'd say it is close to a Shakespearean sonnett. A few beats added for pause or swallowed syllables and it's pert near solid, strange rhymees, but gallop it does --and surely it rhymes internally. The scansion reflects, of course, subjective reading -- I am fondee of the spondee. tee hee. there are a few other feet in there--which i forwent? A right nice smote poem I'd say. O! I gave a readingand it was grand--read with Matt Derby--check him out! suse - Original Message - From: michael leigh [EMAIL PROTECTED] To: FLUXLIST@scribble.com Sent: Saturday, November 19, 2005 5:11 PM Subject: RE: RE: FLUXLIST: Jack A. Withers Smote poem Neglecting the meter will not affect your gas supply but poems will be charged for every therm used . Therm more than others. Michael --- Roger Stevens [EMAIL PROTECTED] wrote: Of course I was neglecting that particular meter, fine and noble as it is Silly me It's a blog! http://rogerstevens.blogspot.com Wonky Finger - Live at Staplecroft Village Hall Order your copy at http://www.rabbitpress.com Visit The Poetry Zone http://www.poetryzone.co.uk -Original Message- From: [EMAIL PROTECTED] [mailto:[EMAIL PROTECTED] On Behalf Of JOHN BENNETT Sent: 19 November 2005 14:16 To: FLUXLIST@scribble.com Subject: Re: RE: FLUXLIST: Jack A. Withers Smote poem These are Johnee sonnets, written in Johnee meter etc! John Dr. John M. Bennett Curator, Avant Writing Collection Rare Books Manuscripts Library The Ohio State University Libraries 1858 Neil Av Mall Columbus, OH 43210 USA (614) 292-3029 [EMAIL PROTECTED] www.johnmbennett.net - Original Message - From: Roger Stevens [EMAIL PROTECTED] Date: Friday, November 18, 2005 1:07 pm Subject: RE: FLUXLIST: Jack A. Withers Smote poem Okay - the two short lines are released to float amidst the three
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So it's spinning with spondees! Wonderful, thanks for clarifying! I will send this to Mr. Smote straight away - Onvoids, John Dr. John M. Bennett Curator, Avant Writing Collection Rare Books Manuscripts Library The Ohio State University Libraries 1858 Neil Av Mall Columbus, OH 43210 USA (614) 292-3029 [EMAIL PROTECTED] www.johnmbennett.net - Original Message - From: suse [EMAIL PROTECTED] Date: Saturday, November 19, 2005 9:13 pm Subject: Re: RE: FLUXLIST: Jack A. Withers Smote poem using: iambic, anapestic, trochaic, dactylic, spondaic, pyrrhic and forgoing: amphi anti bacchi, chori crete and epi Whip lick every entity: Lentils' heavy dick --Jack A. Withers Smote With the sardines of your neighbors-spondee, iamb, iamb, trochee-8-a those very pretty plastic balls like-dactyl, spondee, spondee, spondee-9-b hosers on the shore strong models of your-spondee, spondee, spondee,trocheel, trochee-10-a jungle verbiage in the cellphone lake-trochee, dactyl, anapest, dactyl-10-slnted b Organ hand and legless jokes some-trochee, spndee, trochee, spondee-8-c jackoff zoo with puddles of cough syrup you-Pyrric, iamb, trochee, iamb, trochee-11-d stirred the long mud clues and stacked-trochee, trochee, trochee, bum--7-imbed? (in bed?) gum smokes, the eggless hands and doormen-spondee, iamb, dactyl, spondee--9-slnt c Cake dome hell on the swim curbbage's bumbled-trochee, trochee, iamb, dactyl.. spondee-11-e glove your yodels snore the bomb closers-trochee, trochee, dactyl, spondee-9-slant b petting every wall in spastic clothes: oh, spondee, spondee, spondee, spondee, spon--dee-10-(slant ac) neighing floor of hard beans: the whip!-anapest, anapest, Iamb!-8-f After Blaster Al Ackerman's ---spndee--spondee--iamb, spondee- 8g The Sardines of Your Neighbors---iamb, iamb, dactyl-7-a From this primitive and limited scansion I'd say it is close to a Shakespearean sonnett. A few beats added for pause or swallowed syllablesand it's pert near solid, strange rhymees, but gallop it does --and surely it rhymes internally. The scansion reflects, of course, subjective reading -- I am fondee of the spondee. tee hee. there are a few other feet in there--which i forwent? A right nice smote poem I'd say. O! I gave a readingand it was grand--read with Matt Derby--check him out! suse - Original Message - From: michael leigh [EMAIL PROTECTED] To: FLUXLIST@scribble.com Sent: Saturday, November 19, 2005 5:11 PM Subject: RE: RE: FLUXLIST: Jack A. Withers Smote poem Neglecting the meter will not affect your gas supply but poems will be charged for every therm used . Therm more than others. Michael --- Roger Stevens [EMAIL PROTECTED] wrote: Of course I was neglecting that particular meter, fine and noble as it is Silly me It's a blog! http://rogerstevens.blogspot.com Wonky Finger - Live at Staplecroft Village Hall Order your copy at http://www.rabbitpress.com Visit The Poetry Zone http://www.poetryzone.co.uk -Original Message- From: [EMAIL PROTECTED] [EMAIL PROTECTED] On Behalf Of JOHN BENNETT Sent: 19 November 2005 14:16 To: FLUXLIST@scribble.com Subject: Re: RE: FLUXLIST: Jack A. Withers Smote poem These are Johnee sonnets, written in Johnee meter etc! John Dr. John M. Bennett Curator, Avant Writing Collection Rare Books Manuscripts Library The Ohio State University Libraries 1858 Neil Av Mall Columbus, OH 43210 USA (614) 292-3029 [EMAIL PROTECTED] www.johnmbennett.net - Original Message - From: Roger Stevens [EMAIL PROTECTED] Date: Friday, November 18, 2005 1:07 pm Subject: RE: FLUXLIST: Jack A. Withers Smote poem Okay - the two short lines are released to float amidst the three quatrains. fine And the ends of the lines rhyme, in a relaxed way - in the Shakespeareanstyle actually - But what about the meter and the rhythm? Answer me that! It's a blog! target=l target=lhttp://rogerstevens.blogspot.com http://rogerstevens.blogspot.com Wonky Finger - Live at Staplecroft Village Hall Order your copy at target=l target=lhttp://www.rabbitpress.com http://www.rabbitpress.com Visit The Poetry Zone http://www.poetryzone.co.uk target=l target=lhttp://rogerstevens.blogspot.com -Original Message- From: [EMAIL PROTECTED] [EMAIL PROTECTED] On Behalf Of John M. Bennett Sent: 18 November 2005 15:16 To: FLUXLIST@scribble.com Subject: RE: FLUXLIST: Jack A. Withers Smote poem Uh, it is a sonnet unless you define sonnet in strictly narrow
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I'll ask him and get back to you tomorrow, but I'm betting that cake in these thoughts would be right up Smote's alley. Mine too, come to think of it - John Dr. John M. Bennett Curator, Avant Writing Collection Rare Books Manuscripts Library The Ohio State University Libraries 1858 Neil Av Mall Columbus, OH 43210 USA (614) 292-3029 [EMAIL PROTECTED] www.johnmbennett.net - Original Message - From: suse [EMAIL PROTECTED] Date: Sunday, November 20, 2005 2:07 pm Subject: Re: RE: FLUXLIST: Jack A. Withers Smote poem another W.S. XXIX. When, in disgrace with fortune and men's eyes, I all alone beweep my outcast state And trouble deaf heaven with my bootless cries And look upon myself and curse my fate, Wishing me like to one more rich in hope, Featured like him, like him with friends possess'd, Desiring this man's art and that man's scope, With what I most enjoy contented least; Yet in these thoughts myself almost despising, Haply I think on thee, and then my state, Like to the lark at break of day arising From sullen earth, sings hymns at heaven's gate; For thy sweet love remember'd such wealth brings That then I scorn to change my state with kings. query Mr. Withers Smote: would you consider exchanging yet for cake based on this reading? - Original Message - From: Roger Stevens [EMAIL PROTECTED] To: FLUXLIST@scribble.com Sent: Sunday, November 20, 2005 6:31 AM Subject: RE: RE: FLUXLIST: Jack A. Withers Smote poem A masterful analysis For me it has become another poem entirely It's a blog! http://rogerstevens.blogspot.com Wonky Finger - Live at Staplecroft Village Hall Order your copy at http://www.rabbitpress.com Visit The Poetry Zone http://www.poetryzone.co.uk -Original Message- From: [EMAIL PROTECTED] [EMAIL PROTECTED] On Behalf Of suse Sent: 20 November 2005 02:13 To: FLUXLIST@scribble.com Subject: Re: RE: FLUXLIST: Jack A. Withers Smote poem using: iambic, anapestic, trochaic, dactylic, spondaic, pyrrhic and forgoing: amphi anti bacchi, chori crete and epi Whip lick every entity: Lentils' heavy dick --Jack A. Withers Smote With the sardines of your neighbors-spondee, iamb, iamb, trochee-8-a those very pretty plastic balls like-dactyl, spondee, spondee, spondee-9-b hosers on the shore strong models of your-spondee, spondee, spondee, trocheel, trochee-10-a jungle verbiage in the cellphone lake-trochee, dactyl, anapest, dactyl-10-slnted b Organ hand and legless jokes some-trochee, spndee, trochee, spondee-8-c jackoff zoo with puddles of cough syrup you-Pyrric, iamb, trochee, iamb, trochee-11-d stirred the long mud clues and stacked-trochee, trochee, trochee, bum--7-imbed? (in bed?) gum smokes, the eggless hands and doormen-spondee, iamb, dactyl, spondee--9-slnt c Cake dome hell on the swim curbbage's bumbled-trochee, trochee, iamb, dactyl.. spondee-11-e glove your yodels snore the bomb closers-trochee, trochee, dactyl, spondee-9-slant b petting every wall in spastic clothes: oh, spondee, spondee, spondee, spondee, spon--dee-10-(slant ac) neighing floor of hard beans: the whip!-anapest, anapest, Iamb!-8-f After Blaster Al Ackerman's ---spndee--spondee--iamb, spondee -8g The Sardines of Your Neighbors---iamb, iamb, dactyl-7-a From this primitive and limited scansion I'd say it is close to a Shakespearean sonnett. A few beats added for pause or swallowed syllables and it's pert near solid, strange rhymees, but gallop it does - -and surely it rhymes internally. The scansion reflects, of course, subjective reading -- I am fondee of the spondee. tee hee. there are a few other feet in there--which i forwent? A right nice smote poem I'd say. O! I gave a readingand it was grand--read with Matt Derby--check him out! suse - Original Message - From: michael leigh [EMAIL PROTECTED] To: FLUXLIST@scribble.com Sent: Saturday, November 19, 2005 5:11 PM Subject: RE: RE: FLUXLIST: Jack A. Withers Smote poem Neglecting the meter will not affect your gas supply but poems will be charged for every therm used . Therm more than others. Michael --- Roger Stevens [EMAIL PROTECTED] wrote: Of course I was neglecting that particular meter, fine and noble as it is Silly me It's a blog! http://rogerstevens.blogspot.com Wonky Finger - Live at Staplecroft Village Hall Order your copy at http://www.rabbitpress.com Visit The Poetry Zone http://www.poetryzone.co.uk -Original Message- From: [EMAIL PROTECTED] [EMAIL PROTECTED] On Behalf Of JOHN BENNETT Sent: 19 November
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These are Johnee sonnets, written in Johnee meter etc! John Dr. John M. Bennett Curator, Avant Writing Collection Rare Books Manuscripts Library The Ohio State University Libraries 1858 Neil Av Mall Columbus, OH 43210 USA (614) 292-3029 [EMAIL PROTECTED] www.johnmbennett.net - Original Message - From: Roger Stevens [EMAIL PROTECTED] Date: Friday, November 18, 2005 1:07 pm Subject: RE: FLUXLIST: Jack A. Withers Smote poem Okay - the two short lines are released to float amidst the three quatrains. fine And the ends of the lines rhyme, in a relaxed way - in the Shakespeareanstyle actually - But what about the meter and the rhythm? Answer me that! It's a blog! target=lhttp://rogerstevens.blogspot.com http://rogerstevens.blogspot.com Wonky Finger - Live at Staplecroft Village Hall Order your copy at target=lhttp://www.rabbitpress.com http://www.rabbitpress.com Visit The Poetry Zone http://www.poetryzone.co.uk target=lhttp://rogerstevens.blogspot.com -Original Message- From: [EMAIL PROTECTED] [EMAIL PROTECTED] On Behalf Of John M. Bennett Sent: 18 November 2005 15:16 To: FLUXLIST@scribble.com Subject: RE: FLUXLIST: Jack A. Withers Smote poem Uh, it is a sonnet unless you define sonnet in strictly narrow terms, as being only a Shakespearean or Petrarchan. This is one of Bennett'ssonnet forms, as seen by Smote. But it's got the 14 lines, 3 quatrains, and a couplet consisting of the 2 short lines. A fairly traditional sonnet in form in my book. Bennett is getting reactionary perhaps? John At 05:23 AM 11/18/2005, you wrote: I don't wish to be pedantic (or maybe I do) Or maybe I'm missing something But this doesn't bear any relation to a sonnet. -Original Message- From: [EMAIL PROTECTED] [ ') [EMAIL PROTECTED] [EMAIL PROTECTED] On Behalf Of John M. Bennett Sent: 17 November 2005 21:07 To: [EMAIL PROTECTED] Subject: FLUXLIST: Jack A. Withers Smote poem Smote sent me this, seems he's trying out my recent sonnet form: Whip With the sardines of your neighbors those very pretty plastic balls like hosers on the shore strong models of your jungle verbiage in the cellphone lake Lick every entity Organ hand and legless jokes some jackoff zoo with puddles of cough syrup you stirred the long mud clues and stacked gum smokes, the eggless hands and doormen Lentils' heavy dick Cake dome hell on the swim curbbage's bumbled glove your yodels snore the bomb closers petting every wall in spastic clothes: oh neighing floor of hard beans: the whip! Jack A. Withers Smote After Blaster Al Ackerman's The Sardines of Your Neighbors __ Dr. John M. Bennett Curator, Avant Writing Collection Rare Books Manuscripts Library The Ohio State University Libraries 1858 Neil Av Mall Columbus, OH 43210 USA (614) 292-3029 [EMAIL PROTECTED] www.johnmbennett.net ___ __ Dr. John M. Bennett Curator, Avant Writing Collection Rare Books Manuscripts Library The Ohio State University Libraries 1858 Neil Av Mall Columbus, OH 43210 USA (614) 292-3029 [EMAIL PROTECTED] www.johnmbennett.net ___
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Of course I was neglecting that particular meter, fine and noble as it is Silly me It's a blog! http://rogerstevens.blogspot.com Wonky Finger - Live at Staplecroft Village Hall Order your copy at http://www.rabbitpress.com Visit The Poetry Zone http://www.poetryzone.co.uk -Original Message- From: [EMAIL PROTECTED] [mailto:[EMAIL PROTECTED] On Behalf Of JOHN BENNETT Sent: 19 November 2005 14:16 To: FLUXLIST@scribble.com Subject: Re: RE: FLUXLIST: Jack A. Withers Smote poem These are Johnee sonnets, written in Johnee meter etc! John Dr. John M. Bennett Curator, Avant Writing Collection Rare Books Manuscripts Library The Ohio State University Libraries 1858 Neil Av Mall Columbus, OH 43210 USA (614) 292-3029 [EMAIL PROTECTED] www.johnmbennett.net - Original Message - From: Roger Stevens [EMAIL PROTECTED] Date: Friday, November 18, 2005 1:07 pm Subject: RE: FLUXLIST: Jack A. Withers Smote poem Okay - the two short lines are released to float amidst the three quatrains. fine And the ends of the lines rhyme, in a relaxed way - in the Shakespeareanstyle actually - But what about the meter and the rhythm? Answer me that! It's a blog! target=lhttp://rogerstevens.blogspot.com http://rogerstevens.blogspot.com Wonky Finger - Live at Staplecroft Village Hall Order your copy at target=lhttp://www.rabbitpress.com http://www.rabbitpress.com Visit The Poetry Zone http://www.poetryzone.co.uk target=lhttp://rogerstevens.blogspot.com -Original Message- From: [EMAIL PROTECTED] [EMAIL PROTECTED] On Behalf Of John M. Bennett Sent: 18 November 2005 15:16 To: FLUXLIST@scribble.com Subject: RE: FLUXLIST: Jack A. Withers Smote poem Uh, it is a sonnet unless you define sonnet in strictly narrow terms, as being only a Shakespearean or Petrarchan. This is one of Bennett'ssonnet forms, as seen by Smote. But it's got the 14 lines, 3 quatrains, and a couplet consisting of the 2 short lines. A fairly traditional sonnet in form in my book. Bennett is getting reactionary perhaps? John At 05:23 AM 11/18/2005, you wrote: I don't wish to be pedantic (or maybe I do) Or maybe I'm missing something But this doesn't bear any relation to a sonnet. -Original Message- From: [EMAIL PROTECTED] [ ') [EMAIL PROTECTED] [EMAIL PROTECTED] On Behalf Of John M. Bennett Sent: 17 November 2005 21:07 To: [EMAIL PROTECTED] Subject: FLUXLIST: Jack A. Withers Smote poem Smote sent me this, seems he's trying out my recent sonnet form: Whip With the sardines of your neighbors those very pretty plastic balls like hosers on the shore strong models of your jungle verbiage in the cellphone lake Lick every entity Organ hand and legless jokes some jackoff zoo with puddles of cough syrup you stirred the long mud clues and stacked gum smokes, the eggless hands and doormen Lentils' heavy dick Cake dome hell on the swim curbbage's bumbled glove your yodels snore the bomb closers petting every wall in spastic clothes: oh neighing floor of hard beans: the whip! Jack A. Withers Smote After Blaster Al Ackerman's The Sardines of Your Neighbors __ Dr. John M. Bennett Curator, Avant Writing Collection Rare Books Manuscripts Library The Ohio State University Libraries 1858 Neil Av Mall Columbus, OH 43210 USA (614) 292-3029 [EMAIL PROTECTED] www.johnmbennett.net ___ __ Dr. John M. Bennett Curator, Avant Writing Collection Rare Books Manuscripts Library The Ohio State University Libraries 1858 Neil Av Mall Columbus, OH 43210 USA (614) 292-3029 [EMAIL PROTECTED] www.johnmbennett.net ___
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Neglecting the meter will not affect your gas supply but poems will be charged for every therm used . Therm more than others. Michael --- Roger Stevens [EMAIL PROTECTED] wrote: Of course I was neglecting that particular meter, fine and noble as it is Silly me It's a blog! http://rogerstevens.blogspot.com Wonky Finger - Live at Staplecroft Village Hall Order your copy at http://www.rabbitpress.com Visit The Poetry Zone http://www.poetryzone.co.uk -Original Message- From: [EMAIL PROTECTED] [mailto:[EMAIL PROTECTED] On Behalf Of JOHN BENNETT Sent: 19 November 2005 14:16 To: FLUXLIST@scribble.com Subject: Re: RE: FLUXLIST: Jack A. Withers Smote poem These are Johnee sonnets, written in Johnee meter etc! John Dr. John M. Bennett Curator, Avant Writing Collection Rare Books Manuscripts Library The Ohio State University Libraries 1858 Neil Av Mall Columbus, OH 43210 USA (614) 292-3029 [EMAIL PROTECTED] www.johnmbennett.net - Original Message - From: Roger Stevens [EMAIL PROTECTED] Date: Friday, November 18, 2005 1:07 pm Subject: RE: FLUXLIST: Jack A. Withers Smote poem Okay - the two short lines are released to float amidst the three quatrains. fine And the ends of the lines rhyme, in a relaxed way - in the Shakespeareanstyle actually - But what about the meter and the rhythm? Answer me that! It's a blog! target=lhttp://rogerstevens.blogspot.com http://rogerstevens.blogspot.com Wonky Finger - Live at Staplecroft Village Hall Order your copy at target=lhttp://www.rabbitpress.com http://www.rabbitpress.com Visit The Poetry Zone http://www.poetryzone.co.uk target=lhttp://rogerstevens.blogspot.com -Original Message- From: [EMAIL PROTECTED] [EMAIL PROTECTED] On Behalf Of John M. Bennett Sent: 18 November 2005 15:16 To: FLUXLIST@scribble.com Subject: RE: FLUXLIST: Jack A. Withers Smote poem Uh, it is a sonnet unless you define sonnet in strictly narrow terms, as being only a Shakespearean or Petrarchan. This is one of Bennett'ssonnet forms, as seen by Smote. But it's got the 14 lines, 3 quatrains, and a couplet consisting of the 2 short lines. A fairly traditional sonnet in form in my book. Bennett is getting reactionary perhaps? John At 05:23 AM 11/18/2005, you wrote: I don't wish to be pedantic (or maybe I do) Or maybe I'm missing something But this doesn't bear any relation to a sonnet. -Original Message- From: [EMAIL PROTECTED] [ ') [EMAIL PROTECTED] [EMAIL PROTECTED] On Behalf Of John M. Bennett Sent: 17 November 2005 21:07 To: [EMAIL PROTECTED] Subject: FLUXLIST: Jack A. Withers Smote poem Smote sent me this, seems he's trying out my recent sonnet form: Whip With the sardines of your neighbors those very pretty plastic balls like hosers on the shore strong models of your jungle verbiage in the cellphone lake Lick every entity Organ hand and legless jokes some jackoff zoo with puddles of cough syrup you stirred the long mud clues and stacked gum smokes, the eggless hands and doormen Lentils' heavy dick Cake dome hell on the swim curbbage's bumbled glove your yodels snore the bomb closers petting every wall in spastic clothes: oh neighing floor of hard beans: the whip! Jack A. Withers Smote After Blaster Al Ackerman's The Sardines of Your Neighbors __ Dr. John M. Bennett Curator, Avant Writing Collection Rare Books Manuscripts Library The Ohio State University Libraries 1858 Neil Av Mall Columbus, OH 43210 USA (614) 292-3029 [EMAIL PROTECTED] www.johnmbennett.net ___ __ Dr. John M. Bennett Curator, Avant Writing Collection Rare Books Manuscripts Library The Ohio State University Libraries 1858 Neil Av Mall Columbus, OH 43210 USA (614) 292-3029 [EMAIL PROTECTED] www.johnmbennett.net ___ It's another blog! http://flobberlob.blogspot.com/ ___ To help you stay safe and secure online, we've developed the all new Yahoo! Security Centre. http://uk.security.yahoo.com
Re: RE: FLUXLIST: Jack A. Withers Smote poem
using: iambic, anapestic, trochaic, dactylic, spondaic, pyrrhic and forgoing: amphi anti bacchi, chori crete and epi Whip lick every entity: Lentils' heavy dick --Jack A. Withers Smote With the sardines of your neighbors-spondee, iamb, iamb, trochee-8-a those very pretty plastic balls like-dactyl, spondee, spondee, spondee-9-b hosers on the shore strong models of your-spondee, spondee, spondee, trocheel, trochee-10-a jungle verbiage in the cellphone lake-trochee, dactyl, anapest, dactyl-10-slnted b Organ hand and legless jokes some-trochee, spndee, trochee, spondee-8-c jackoff zoo with puddles of cough syrup you-Pyrric, iamb, trochee, iamb, trochee-11-d stirred the long mud clues and stacked-trochee, trochee, trochee, bum--7-imbed? (in bed?) gum smokes, the eggless hands and doormen-spondee, iamb, dactyl, spondee--9-slnt c Cake dome hell on the swim curbbage's bumbled-trochee, trochee, iamb, dactyl.. spondee-11-e glove your yodels snore the bomb closers-trochee, trochee, dactyl, spondee-9-slant b petting every wall in spastic clothes: oh, spondee, spondee, spondee, spondee, spon--dee-10-(slant ac) neighing floor of hard beans: the whip!-anapest, anapest, Iamb!-8-f After Blaster Al Ackerman's ---spndee--spondee--iamb, spondee-8g The Sardines of Your Neighbors---iamb, iamb, dactyl-7-a From this primitive and limited scansion I'd say it is close to a Shakespearean sonnett. A few beats added for pause or swallowed syllables and it's pert near solid, strange rhymees, but gallop it does --and surely it rhymes internally. The scansion reflects, of course, subjective reading -- I am fondee of the spondee. tee hee. there are a few other feet in there--which i forwent? A right nice smote poem I'd say. O! I gave a readingand it was grand--read with Matt Derby--check him out! suse - Original Message - From: michael leigh [EMAIL PROTECTED] To: FLUXLIST@scribble.com Sent: Saturday, November 19, 2005 5:11 PM Subject: RE: RE: FLUXLIST: Jack A. Withers Smote poem Neglecting the meter will not affect your gas supply but poems will be charged for every therm used . Therm more than others. Michael --- Roger Stevens [EMAIL PROTECTED] wrote: Of course I was neglecting that particular meter, fine and noble as it is Silly me It's a blog! http://rogerstevens.blogspot.com Wonky Finger - Live at Staplecroft Village Hall Order your copy at http://www.rabbitpress.com Visit The Poetry Zone http://www.poetryzone.co.uk -Original Message- From: [EMAIL PROTECTED] [mailto:[EMAIL PROTECTED] On Behalf Of JOHN BENNETT Sent: 19 November 2005 14:16 To: FLUXLIST@scribble.com Subject: Re: RE: FLUXLIST: Jack A. Withers Smote poem These are Johnee sonnets, written in Johnee meter etc! John Dr. John M. Bennett Curator, Avant Writing Collection Rare Books Manuscripts Library The Ohio State University Libraries 1858 Neil Av Mall Columbus, OH 43210 USA (614) 292-3029 [EMAIL PROTECTED] www.johnmbennett.net - Original Message - From: Roger Stevens [EMAIL PROTECTED] Date: Friday, November 18, 2005 1:07 pm Subject: RE: FLUXLIST: Jack A. Withers Smote poem Okay - the two short lines are released to float amidst the three quatrains. fine And the ends of the lines rhyme, in a relaxed way - in the Shakespeareanstyle actually - But what about the meter and the rhythm? Answer me that! It's a blog! target=lhttp://rogerstevens.blogspot.com http://rogerstevens.blogspot.com Wonky Finger - Live at Staplecroft Village Hall Order your copy at target=lhttp://www.rabbitpress.com http://www.rabbitpress.com Visit The Poetry Zone http://www.poetryzone.co.uk target=lhttp://rogerstevens.blogspot.com -Original Message- From: [EMAIL PROTECTED] [EMAIL PROTECTED] On Behalf Of John M. Bennett Sent: 18 November 2005 15:16 To: FLUXLIST@scribble.com Subject: RE: FLUXLIST: Jack A. Withers Smote poem Uh, it is a sonnet unless you define sonnet in strictly narrow terms, as being only a Shakespearean or Petrarchan. This is one of Bennett'ssonnet forms, as seen by Smote. But it's got the 14 lines, 3 quatrains, and a couplet consisting of the 2 short lines. A fairly traditional sonnet in form in my book. Bennett is getting reactionary perhaps? John At 05:23 AM 11/18/2005, you wrote: I don't wish to be pedantic (or maybe I do) Or maybe I'm missing something But this doesn't bear any relation to a sonnet. -Original Message- From: [EMAIL PROTECTED] [ ') [EMAIL PROTECTED] [EMAIL PROTECTED] On Behalf Of John M. Bennett Sent: 17 November 2005 21:07
RE: FLUXLIST: Jack A. Withers Smote poem
I dont wish to be pedantic (or maybe I do) Or maybe Im missing something But this doesnt bear any relation to a sonnet -Original Message- From: [EMAIL PROTECTED] [mailto:[EMAIL PROTECTED] On Behalf Of John M. Bennett Sent: 17 November 2005 21:07 To: [EMAIL PROTECTED] Subject: FLUXLIST: Jack A. Withers Smote poem Smote sent me this, seems he's trying out my recent sonnet form: Whip With the sardines of your neighbors those very pretty plastic balls like hosers on the shore strong models of your jungle verbiage in the cellphone lake Lick every entity Organ hand and legless jokes some jackoff zoo with puddles of cough syrup you stirred the long mud clues and stacked gum smokes, the eggless hands and doormen Lentils heavy dick Cake dome hell on the swim curbbages bumbled glove your yodels snore the bomb closers petting every wall in spastic clothes: oh neighing floor of hard beans: the whip! Jack A. Withers Smote After Blaster Al Ackermans The Sardines of Your Neighbors __ Dr. John M. Bennett Curator, Avant Writing Collection Rare Books Manuscripts Library The Ohio State University Libraries 1858 Neil Av Mall Columbus, OH 43210 USA (614) 292-3029 [EMAIL PROTECTED] www.johnmbennett.net ___
RE: FLUXLIST: Jack A. Withers Smote poem
Uh, it is a sonnet unless you define sonnet in strictly narrow terms, as being only a Shakespearean or Petrarchan. This is one of Bennett's sonnet forms, as seen by Smote. But it's got the 14 lines, 3 quatrains, and a couplet consisting of the 2 short lines. A fairly traditional sonnet in form in my book. Bennett is getting reactionary perhaps? John At 05:23 AM 11/18/2005, you wrote: I dont wish to be pedantic (or maybe I do) Or maybe Im missing something But this doesnt bear any relation to a sonnet -Original Message- From: [EMAIL PROTECTED] [ mailto:[EMAIL PROTECTED]] On Behalf Of John M. Bennett Sent: 17 November 2005 21:07 To: [EMAIL PROTECTED] Subject: FLUXLIST: Jack A. Withers Smote poem Smote sent me this, seems he's trying out my recent sonnet form: Whip With the sardines of your neighbors those very pretty plastic balls like hosers on the shore strong models of your jungle verbiage in the cellphone lake Lick every entity Organ hand and legless jokes some jackoff zoo with puddles of cough syrup you stirred the long mud clues and stacked gum smokes, the eggless hands and doormen Lentils heavy dick Cake dome hell on the swim curbbages bumbled glove your yodels snore the bomb closers petting every wall in spastic clothes: oh neighing floor of hard beans: the whip! Jack A. Withers Smote After Blaster Al Ackermans The Sardines of Your Neighbors __ Dr. John M. BennettCurator, Avant Writing Collection Rare Books Manuscripts Library The Ohio State University Libraries 1858 Neil Av Mall Columbus, OH 43210 USA (614) 292-3029 [EMAIL PROTECTED] www.johnmbennett.net ___ __ Dr. John M. Bennett Curator, Avant Writing Collection Rare Books Manuscripts Library The Ohio State University Libraries 1858 Neil Av Mall Columbus, OH 43210 USA (614) 292-3029 [EMAIL PROTECTED] www.johnmbennett.net ___
Re: FLUXLIST: Jack A. Withers Smote poem
Aging in Bush's America will do that to a guy...On Nov 18, 2005, at 9:15 AM, John M. Bennett wrote: Bennett is getting reactionary perhaps?
RE: FLUXLIST: Jack A. Withers Smote poem
Okay the two short lines are released to float amidst the three quatrains fine And the ends of the lines rhyme, in a relaxed way in the Shakespearean style actually But what about the meter and the rhythm? Answer me that! It's a blog! http://rogerstevens.blogspot.com Wonky Finger - Live at Staplecroft Village Hall Order your copy at http://www.rabbitpress.com Visit The Poetry Zone http://www.poetryzone.co.uk -Original Message- From: [EMAIL PROTECTED] [mailto:[EMAIL PROTECTED] On Behalf Of John M. Bennett Sent: 18 November 2005 15:16 To: FLUXLIST@scribble.com Subject: RE: FLUXLIST: Jack A. Withers Smote poem Uh, it is a sonnet unless you define sonnet in strictly narrow terms, as being only a Shakespearean or Petrarchan. This is one of Bennett's sonnet forms, as seen by Smote. But it's got the 14 lines, 3 quatrains, and a couplet consisting of the 2 short lines. A fairly traditional sonnet in form in my book. Bennett is getting reactionary perhaps? John At 05:23 AM 11/18/2005, you wrote: I dont wish to be pedantic (or maybe I do) Or maybe Im missing something But this doesnt bear any relation to a sonnet -Original Message- From: [EMAIL PROTECTED] [ mailto:[EMAIL PROTECTED]] On Behalf Of John M. Bennett Sent: 17 November 2005 21:07 To: [EMAIL PROTECTED] Subject: FLUXLIST: Jack A. Withers Smote poem Smote sent me this, seems he's trying out my recent sonnet form: Whip With the sardines of your neighbors those very pretty plastic balls like hosers on the shore strong models of your jungle verbiage in the cellphone lake Lick every entity Organ hand and legless jokes some jackoff zoo with puddles of cough syrup you stirred the long mud clues and stacked gum smokes, the eggless hands and doormen Lentils heavy dick Cake dome hell on the swim curbbages bumbled glove your yodels snore the bomb closers petting every wall in spastic clothes: oh neighing floor of hard beans: the whip! Jack A. Withers Smote After Blaster Al Ackermans The Sardines of Your Neighbors __ Dr. John M. BennettCurator, Avant Writing Collection Rare Books Manuscripts Library The Ohio State University Libraries 1858 Neil Av Mall Columbus, OH 43210 USA (614) 292-3029 [EMAIL PROTECTED] www.johnmbennett.net ___ __ Dr. John M. Bennett Curator, Avant Writing Collection Rare Books Manuscripts Library The Ohio State University Libraries 1858 Neil Av Mall Columbus, OH 43210 USA (614) 292-3029 [EMAIL PROTECTED] www.johnmbennett.net ___
