Matt - typos and grammatical errors I've spotted. I am personally always very suspicious of any company large or small that can't write accurate English - especially in the UK! There's some excuse for Johnny Foreigner as he hasn't had the benefit of a proper education in the language - though sadly that is becoming rarer in this country now, thanks to the long-haired, scruffy weirdos that pass for teachers in many schools.
On the Home Page: client's should read clients' (as presumably your customers will usually each have more than one client?) On The Green Suite Page ".... utilising exising (missing t) hardware where possible" I also think that the correct term is low wattage. On Green Servers - Para 2 should read customers' (missing apostrophe) Same section under High Availability - " ... do you lose " (not loose - that's setting them free! ) - used twice in same line! Next para - I'd suggest a comma after "configuration." Consultancy - " .... creating a scalable web-clusters." Either drop the 'a' or the final 's' !!! (Use of jargon that isn't explained is always dangerous!!) Company History - second para - the word systems is used three times - twice with a small 's' and once with a capital. Consistency please! Third section dealing with Internet presence: (The word Internet should be spelt with a capital letter - refer to Oxford English Dictionary which can be searched online.) You say " .... provision and maintain a dedicated " Provision is NOT a stand-alone verb despite the attempts of the US to make it one! It's a transitive verb and should, as I have always understood it, only be used in "make provision" or "supply provisions for" or similar contexts. For correct English this should read provide! (I think the intention is to say you can provide and configure a system and then maintain it). Insert a comma after ' ...organisation'. At the bottom of the page there's no web-link on the web address. Legal Notices - they do not "fall into" anything! They may "consist of" or be "summarised in." They are inanimate! I haven't read the Legal Documents as I would expect them to have been provided by a solicitor who would ensure all wording and punctuation is correct. However, there is an error on the Copyright Document which makes me wonder! It reads "This website and its content is copyright ..... " Two items so it should read "This website and its content are copyright ..." It's not worth cutting corners on these documents - if there is a problem and they come to be what is relied upon as a defence, the fact there are errors will enable the other party and/or their legal team to drive a coach and horses through them. Too many people have made this mistake - don't you (or your client) be another! Given the tendency to go to law these days at the drop of a hat, I'd make sure my documents are watertight, airtight and very definitely "lawyer-tight" (if there is such a thing!)! In the Privacy Policy there are changes of font size for "bulleted" items - it may be deliberate - but then again maybe not! As a matter of interest - where is the telephone number located that is given? It isn't listed in the BT "Code decoder" and I don't recognise the format of it. Sorry to be so pedantic, but I did run a software company for five years that was awarded prizes three years running for the quality of the manuals and sales documentation we produced in terms of clarity, accuracy and ease of use. Ok - it was BI (Before Internet) but the rules haven't changed that much! 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