2009/5/5 <wjhon...@aol.com>: > -----Original Message----- > From: FT2 <ft2.w...@gmail.com> > To: English Wikipedia <wikien-l@lists.wikimedia.org> > Sent: Tue, 5 May 2009 12:35 am > Subject: Re: [WikiEN-l] Twitterpedia will win > > Redundant text - "the X war was a war" duh :) Try this: > > "The Peloponnesian War (Ancient Greece, 431-404BC), took place between > Athens and its empire, against the Eponymous League led by Sparta. Rock > on!">> > > --------------------- > Why do you have to state "Ancient Greece" ? And remove "The" > Also "was" is much shorter than "took place" > > "Peloponnesian War (431-404BC), Athens and its empire, against the > Spartan-led Eponymous League." >
"Peloponnesian War (431-404BC), Athens and its empire vs Spartan-led Eponymous League." -- geni _______________________________________________ WikiEN-l mailing list WikiEN-l@lists.wikimedia.org To unsubscribe from this mailing list, visit: https://lists.wikimedia.org/mailman/listinfo/wikien-l