Hi Yong-Geun, As per my understanding after quick review, following are some editorial and further explanation of some details you mentioned in the draft:
1. 3.2. first para: better further define IPSS or completely exclude it. 2. 3.3. third para: "Portable Parts (PP) attached" - instead of - "PP attached". 3. 4. Design Space. first and second para: incorrect reference of "RFC 6558" - instead of - "RFC 6568" 4. 5.1. first para: suitably rephrasing "However, the person data" to let suppose "However, the personal data, which pose serious issues if mishandled while transferred in wireless domain, can be securely transferred by NFC technology". 5. 5.3. Reliability & QoS: "Latency of SENSOR READINGS" should be low for". 6. 5.4. first para: "communications" - instead of - "communicatios". 7. 5.5. first para: "Therefore, the use case of LTE MTC could be used in LPWAN" - instead of - "Therefore, the use....". 8. 5.5. example: if you are referring to connectivity between end device and LPWAN gateway, how about using the term "fronthaul" instead of "backhaul"? 9. 5.5. example: "star of star topology" - instead of - "star of stat topology". 10. 5.5. example: Maximum data rate is mentioned for LoRa; keeping the consideration of bandwidth aggregation recently proposed in "draft-qin-lpwan-dau-00" would be better. Afterward, we can keep rephrasing the sentence that requires some modifications. Hope you find the suggestions, useful. Thanks. Rashid Sangi, Huawei, Beijing, China. From: 6lo [mailto:[email protected]] On Behalf Of Samita Chakrabarti Sent: 2016年5月14日 8:41 To: [email protected] Subject: Re: [6lo] Call for 6lo Deployment Scenario Document phone meeting PS: Please update the Doodle poll for your preference on attendance. [ for next week] http://doodle.com/poll/y9akcyphnrtvwusa Please reply only to ‘[email protected]’. [ Else the mail administrator complains about too many recipients] Thanks, -Samita From: Samita Chakrabarti Sent: Friday, May 13, 2016 5:28 PM To: Yong-Geun Hong ([email protected]<mailto:[email protected]>); [email protected]<mailto:[email protected]>; Thomas Watteyne ([email protected]<mailto:[email protected]>); [email protected]<mailto:[email protected]>; Carsten Bormann ([email protected]<mailto:[email protected]>); Mohit Sethi M; [email protected]<mailto:[email protected]>; 'Das, Subir'; '[email protected]'; '[email protected]'; Alexander Pelov ([email protected]<mailto:[email protected]>); Gabriel Montenegro ([email protected]<mailto:[email protected]>) Cc: [email protected]<mailto:[email protected]> Subject: Call for 6lo Deployment Scenario Document phone meeting Hello All: At Buenos Aires, we had a very productive discussion on updating https://datatracker.ietf.org/doc/draft-hong-6lo-use-cases/ In order to use it more for guidance to other IETF WGs and external SDO as to how 6lo WG technologies might be useful to yet another L2 networks that are serving constrained devices. The document already discusses different parameters for different technologies and typical deployment. The goal is to improve the document and present it as an 6lo Applicability document for others to know how to use this technology. Yong-Geun is heading this effort and he might need some extra hands to help him out. I plan to arrange a phone meeting next week (Wed/Thurs) @7am PDT to discuss: ・ Outline proposal of the updated document ・ Nail down the usecase scenarios Thanks, -Samita PS: Please update the Doodle poll for your preference on attendance. http://doodle.com/poll/y9akcyphnrtvwusa
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