Hi Ben, Many thanks for your review. See my comments below.
Best regards, Jens -----Original Message----- From: Ben Campbell [mailto:[email protected]] Sent: 14. december 2016 01:06 To: The IESG <[email protected]> Cc: [email protected]; Samita Chakrabarti <[email protected]>; [email protected]; [email protected]; [email protected] Subject: Ben Campbell's No Record on draft-ietf-6lo-dect-ule-08: (with COMMENT) Ben Campbell has entered the following ballot position for draft-ietf-6lo-dect-ule-08: No Record When responding, please keep the subject line intact and reply to all email addresses included in the To and CC lines. (Feel free to cut this introductory paragraph, however.) Please refer to https://www.ietf.org/iesg/statement/discuss-criteria.html for more information about IESG DISCUSS and COMMENT positions. The document, along with other ballot positions, can be found here: https://datatracker.ietf.org/doc/draft-ietf-6lo-dect-ule/ ---------------------------------------------------------------------- COMMENT: ---------------------------------------------------------------------- I agree with Alissa's comments. Otherwise, I just have a few nits: - Abstract: Please expand DECT. [Jens]: Done in new revision -09 - section 1: The section could benefit from some paragraph breaks. [Jens]: Good suggestion, done in new revision -09 - 3.2, first paragraph: s/ "implements already fragmentation"/"already implements fragmentation" -- 4th paragraph: s/"PP each have"/"each PP has" [Jens]: Better wording - thanks. Is implemented in new revision -09 _______________________________________________ 6lo mailing list [email protected] https://www.ietf.org/mailman/listinfo/6lo
