Hi Gabriel. The nits collected are from me and Daniel, mostly editorial nits, but here goes:
### Daniels nits ### I believe it is ready to the IESG. Good job Nandu and Gab...:-) Minor nits: both LoWPAN and 6LoWPAN seem a bit confused around the document. If available, defining terminology would be favorable. Daniel (Soohong Daniel Park) Mobile Convergence Laboratory, SAMSUNG Electronics. ### End of Daniels nits ### ### My nits ### Sorry for the late feedback. As Daniel said, good job Nandu and Gab. However, I have the following nitpicks: Section: 2. Overview Possibly missing a linespace between bullet 9. and 10. Section: 4.2. Topologies Last sentence in this section: "This, or course..." should probably be "This, of course" Section: 4.4. Limited configuration and management Last sentence in this section: "...yet be powerful to control dense..." I suggest maybe to add "enough" between "powerful" and "to". Section: 4.6. Security Last sentence in this section: "Please refer to security consideration section below for an in depth requirements for security" I suggest change to: "Please refer to the security considerations section below for in depth security requirements." Section: 5. Goals (Page 7-8): I think the reader would gain a better understanding of the goals for 6lowpan if we start each goal with a clear definition (one-sentence) of the goal, then followed by the related background information. The goals appear more or less hidden in the text in its current form. This is especially true for goal nr. 2, which is mostly background information until at the end it is stated "this goal needs to investigate using existing header compression... ". I also think the usage of word goal in goals 2 and 3 are confusing. Examples: "...this goal needs to investigate..." (Goal nr. 2) "The goal should specify a method..." (Goal nr. 3) It is we (the working group) not the goal , which needs to investigate and to specify. Correct me, if I'm reading it wrong. Overall I think the document is good, and I believe if you incorporate my nits on the goals section, then it is IESG ready. Again, excellent work. :-) Regards Christian ### End of my nits ### Regards Christian -----Original Message----- From: gabriel montenegro [mailto:[EMAIL PROTECTED] Sent: 23. marts 2006 14:14 To: Schumacher Christian Peter Pii; Shah, Rahul C; [EMAIL PROTECTED] Cc: 6lowpan Subject: Re: FW: [6lowpan] Working group last-call on problems document Could either of you forward those nits to me? For some reason I was unsusbscribed from the list and just found out and resubscribed yesterday... thanks, -gabriel --- Schumacher Christian Peter Pii <[EMAIL PROTECTED]> wrote: > Hi Rahul > > Gabriel Montenegro, which is the co-author of the problem statement > document, has volunteered to present the problem statement document and > nits at the WG meeting tomorrow, so you can forget my previous mail. If > you still want to present something you must coordinate with Gabriel, > and Carsten to reserve time in the agenda. > > Regards > Christian > > > -----Original Message----- > From: Schumacher Christian Peter Pii > Sent: 23. marts 2006 09:29 > To: 'Shah, Rahul C' > Cc: 'Kushalnagar, Nandakishore'; Soohong Daniel Park; Geoff Mulligan; > 6lowpan > Subject: RE: [6lowpan] Working group last-call on problems document > > Hi Rahul > > The problem statement document for 6lowpan is on the agenda tomorrow. > I assume you've taken authorship of this document after Nandakishore > Kushalnagar. > The mailing list has received two mails with nits on this document. Will > you collect the importants nits received and give a quick presentation? > > Regards > Christian > > > > -----Original Message----- > From: Kushalnagar, Nandakishore > [mailto:[EMAIL PROTECTED] > Sent: 6. marts 2006 18:45 > To: Soohong Daniel Park; Geoff Mulligan; 6lowpan > Subject: RE: [6lowpan] Working group last-call on problems document > > Thanks Daniel. > > Once all the comments are in, we will do a final walk through to clarify > these inconsistencies. > > Regards > Nandu > > -----Original Message----- > From: Soohong Daniel Park [mailto:[EMAIL PROTECTED] > Sent: Monday, March 06, 2006 12:01 PM > To: Geoff Mulligan; 6lowpan > Subject: Re: [6lowpan] Working group last-call on problems document > > I believe it is ready to the IESG. Good job Nandu and Gab...:-) > > Minor nits: both LoWPAN and 6LoWPAN seem a bit confused > around the document. If available, defining terminology would > be favorable. > > Daniel (Soohong Daniel Park) > Mobile Convergence Laboratory, SAMSUNG Electronics. > > ----- Original Message ----- > From: "Geoff Mulligan" <[EMAIL PROTECTED]> > To: "6lowpan" <[email protected]> > Sent: Tuesday, March 07, 2006 1:12 AM > Subject: [6lowpan] Working group last-call on problems document > > > > Hi, > > This note starts the 6loWPAN Working Group Last-call for comments on > > draft-ietf-6lowpan-problem-02.txt, "6LoWPAN: Overview, Assumptions, > > Problem Statement and Goals". The document can be found at > > ftp://ftp.ietf.org/internet-drafts/draft-ietf-6lowpan-problem-02.txt > > > > Please review the document carefully, and send your feedback to the > > list. Please also indicate whether or not you believe that this > > document is ready to go to the IESG. > > > > This Last Call will end on 20 March 2006 at 0900 MST (UTC - 7), two > > weeks form the time of this call. > > > > Thanks, > > geoff > > > > > > > > > > _______________________________________________ > > 6lowpan mailing list > > [email protected] > > https://www1.ietf.org/mailman/listinfo/6lowpan > > > > > > _______________________________________________ > 6lowpan mailing list > [email protected] > https://www1.ietf.org/mailman/listinfo/6lowpan > > _______________________________________________ > 6lowpan mailing list > [email protected] > https://www1.ietf.org/mailman/listinfo/6lowpan > > _______________________________________________ > 6lowpan mailing list > [email protected] > https://www1.ietf.org/mailman/listinfo/6lowpan > __________________________________________________ Do You Yahoo!? Tired of spam? Yahoo! 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