Éric Vyncke has entered the following ballot position for draft-ietf-6tisch-enrollment-enhanced-beacon-12: No Objection
When responding, please keep the subject line intact and reply to all email addresses included in the To and CC lines. (Feel free to cut this introductory paragraph, however.) Please refer to https://www.ietf.org/iesg/statement/discuss-criteria.html for more information about IESG DISCUSS and COMMENT positions. The document, along with other ballot positions, can be found here: https://datatracker.ietf.org/doc/draft-ietf-6tisch-enrollment-enhanced-beacon/ ---------------------------------------------------------------------- COMMENT: ---------------------------------------------------------------------- Thank you for the work put into this document: it seems simple and easy :-) Nevertheless, please find below some non-blocking COMMENTs (and I would appreciate a response from the authors) and NITS. I hope that this helps to improve the document, Regards, -éric == COMMENTS == -- Abstract -- "announce the presence of the network" makes me wonder... Do nodes announce the network ? or do nodes announced THEIR presence in the network ? or do router nodes announce the network? or am I too unfamiliar with TSCH ? -- Section 1.2 -- Please expand "ASN" at first use. I guess that this is not the usual AS Number ;-) -- Section 1.3 -- Please add a reference for "broadcast aloha slot". Isn't the word "IETF" in "defines a new IETF Information Element (IE)" redundant in an IETF document ? -- Section 2 -- "that need addressing via unicast Router Solicitation messages" is unclear to me... Is to do SLAAC ? or look for an actual router? Add a reference + acronym expansion to RPL at first use. "This field provides the suffix (IID)" please expand interface ID and, on my side, I do not like naming the IID as a suffix. -- Section 5 -- Reading and applying RFC 8126 (how to write IANA considerations) would be beneficial. == NITS == -- Abstract -- Suggest to expand TSCH at first use. -- Section 1.3 -- Unsure whether "reasons: First, there" should have a capitalized "First". There are also many acronyms that should be expanded at first use (I stopped commenting about those). _______________________________________________ 6tisch mailing list [email protected] https://www.ietf.org/mailman/listinfo/6tisch
