Barry Leiba via Datatracker <[email protected]> wrote: > ---------------------------------------------------------------------- > COMMENT: > ----------------------------------------------------------------------
> — Section 1.2 —
I believe that I've dealt with all of Barry's original comments in -13.
> The following are comments from Murray Kucherawy, incoming ART AD.
> Murray is getting an early start on doing reviews, and I’m including
> his comments into my ballots during the overlap period before he’s
> officially an Area Director.
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> Mostly minor things here since this is (currently) well outside my
> domain.
> Every reference to "Enhanced Beacon" in this document parses to me as
> "Enhanced Bacon".
I can't help if Murray is pining for Bacon.
> The nits from directorate reports seem to provide good editorial
> suggestions, though somehow none of them noticed that the second
> paragraph of Section 1.3 starts "Although However". It looks kind of
> like the "although" should actually come after the second comma.
I think that this paragraph already got rewritten.
> I don't know what to make sure of "(see {?RFC7554})". Are they not
> sure about these references? Or is this a new format thing?
This is a markdown failure, it should be {{?RFC7554}}, which markdown expands
to a proper xref. Fixed.
> RFC 8137's IANA section seems especially spartan, but there's nothing
> to be done about that here. (I discovered this by following a
> reference.)
This document is the second user of it.
> In Section 2, "Values range" should be "Values range from".
fixed.
> Same section: "The exact process is a subject of significant research
> work." Are we documenting a process we don't understand? Are any
> references to said research appropriate here?
There are aspects of this, and aspects that are certain.
How to tune/calculate the values is the subject of research.
How to intepret them is clear.
> The sentence "This value MUST be ignored by pledges..." is a comma
> splice.
Fixed.
> Under "pan priority", should "Acycling" be "Acyclic"?
Thanks.
> "nodes'" should be "node's", I think.
agreed. fixed.
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