#16: Section 1.3 - Clarifications and grammer
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s/number of such federated/number of federated/
s/has become/can become/
s/For example, a school might provide online access to
grades to a parent who is also a teacher. She must clearly
distinguish her role upon access./For example, a school might
provide online access to a student's grades to their parents
for review, and to the student's teacher for modifying the
grades. A teacher who is also a parent must clearly
distinguish here role upon access./
The later suggestion makes it much clearer who She is.
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Reporter: ietf@… | Owner: draft-ietf-abfab-arch@…
Type: defect | Status: new
Priority: minor | Milestone:
Component: arch | Version:
Severity: - | Keywords:
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