I read the document and think it is ready. Here are some minor comments:
- abstract and intro: "have to select", personally I feel that "have to" is
a bit strong. A broader category of apps can be included if we say "can".
- "ALTO is realized by a client-server protocol, see requirement AR-1 in
[RFC6708]": how about change "see" to "per" or change "," before see to
";". Also, does it make sense to say "Requirement AR-1", instead of
requirement AR-1?
- Abstract and second paragraph of Intro: "...for resource consumer
initiated ALTO server discovery". A reader not familiar with all of the
terms may not know the meaning of resource consumer. How about adding a
reference to the definition of the term?
- Sec. 3.2: for the U-NAPTR example, I am not an expert on U-NAPTR, but
here is an example from rfc2915:
www.foo.com.
;; order pref flags service regexp replacement
IN NAPTR 100 100 "s" "http+I2R" "" _http._tcp.foo.com.
IN NAPTR 100 100 "s" "ftp+I2R" "" _ftp._tcp.foo.com.
Hence, for the examples in Sec. 3.2, does it make sense to follow the same,
e.g., instead of ALTO:http, but http+ALTO? Also, I am not sure, for the
example, return is "". Again, I am not an expert on the subject, and hence,
my question may be misunderstanding or my lacking of background.
- Sec. 6.1., "e. g." -> "e.g.,"
Cheers,
Richard
On Wed, Nov 28, 2012 at 5:24 PM, Vijay K. Gurbani <[email protected]> wrote:
> [as chair]
>
> Folks: Based on conversations with the authors of the document and
> recent list discussions on the draft, we believe that the ALTO server
> discovery document is ready for WGLC.
>
> The current incarnation of the document is -06 and is available for
> review at
>
>
> http://tools.ietf.org/html/**draft-ietf-alto-server-**discovery-06<http://tools.ietf.org/html/draft-ietf-alto-server-discovery-06>
>
> We urge the working group participants to perform a dedicated review
> of the document. Short statements in support of moving the work ahead,
> or statements that provide constructive solutions for any aspect lacking
> in the draft, are helpful. Please do post such statements on the list.
>
> This WGLC runs until Friday, December 14 2012.
>
> Thank you,
>
> - vijay
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