Hi all,

As I already mentioned in the last IETF meeting, I suggest that 
draft-ietf-alto-protocol does not refer to specific section numbers of 
draft-ietf-alto-deployments. The numbers referenced by 
draft-ietf-alto-protocol-20 are already outdated for 
draft-ietf-alto-deployments-08, and further updates of the deployment draft are 
likely (see below for one example).

Specifically, I suggest to remove this tight coupling by the following small 
changes:

OLD:
Section 10 of [I-D.ietf-alto-deployments] also discusses information leakage 
from ALTO.

NEW:
[I-D.ietf-alto-deployments] also discusses information leakage from ALTO.


OLD:
Note that ALTO-specific monitoring and metrics are discussed in 6.3 of 
[I-D.ietf-alto-deployments] and future versions of that document.

NEW:
Note that ALTO-specific monitoring and metrics are discussed in 
[I-D.ietf-alto-deployments].


OLD:
Both ALTO Service Providers and those using ALTO Clients should be aware of the 
impact of incorrect or faked guidance (see Section 10.3 of 
[I-D.ietf-alto-deployments] and future versions of that document).

NEW:
Both ALTO Service Providers and those using ALTO Clients should be aware of the 
impact of incorrect or faked guidance (see [I-D.ietf-alto-deployments]).


OLD:
Monitoring ALTO Servers and Clients is described in Section 6.3 of 
[I-D.ietf-alto-deployments] and future versions of that document.

NEW:
Monitoring ALTO Servers and Clients is described in [I-D.ietf-alto-deployments].


(The phrase "... and future versions of that document" could also stay.)


As discussed on the list, a performance directorate review asked for 
substantial changes of Section 6.3, which is explicitly references multiple 
times. According to this review, the content of Section 6.3 will have to change 
significantly before publication. 

Note that I moved the existing text from Section 6.3 in 
draft-ietf-alto-deployments-07 into an appendix in 
draft-ietf-alto-deployments-08, because I didn't have time to rewrite this part 
of the document (-08 contains numerous other improvements). Probably, -09 will 
have a reworded, dedicated section on monitoring in the main part again, but 
the section number is TBD.

Thanks

Michael
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