Peter,
The current text is wordy and repetitive and says things more than once <grin>.
Primary focus is to remove repetitive text, tighten remaining text, and
consolidate normative statements.
As an initial example the -05 draft has 3 main sections:
architectural overview
functional overview (contains design considerations discussions)
protocol details
The initial ‘concise’ branch commit moves the functional overview to the
appendix. Subsequent commits are resolving normative texts that were in there
by moving needed bits back into the protocol discussion. You can follow along
via the git repository here:
https://github.com/anima-wg/anima-bootstrap/compare/concise
There was a comment that the design considerations are useful and might be
appropriate to keep here or in another document. At the moment I don’t have a
formulated position on that.
- max
> On Apr 18, 2017, at 3:27 AM, peter van der Stok <[email protected]> wrote:
>
> Hi Max,
>
> excellent idea. I looked at the present version, and there is still a lot of
> text.
> Where in the text do you want to reduce more? What is the end-objective?
> And will this become the final document, or is it a study that will be used
> later for editing the final document?
>
> Peter
>
> Max Pritikin (pritikin) schreef op 2017-04-15 00:34:
>> For those of you tracking the git repository please note the existence
>> of a new branch. As warned I’m significantly reducing the text. This
>> work is going on in the branch “concise”.
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