On Wednesday, November 3, 2004, at 02:23 PM, Paul Hoffman / IMC wrote:
B) The new wording from the Pace, and the exact old wording from the draft, are both really unacceptable, but the following would be fine/OK with me:

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C) The exact old wording in the draft is the best it can be; please don't change it at all.

I'm okay with the exact wording of the draft, but it could be improved by replacing the last sentence with examples. For example:

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The "atom:updated" element is a Date construct indicating the most recent instant in time when a change to the entry was made that the publisher wishes to bring to the attention of subscribers.


The following examples illustrate how a publisher might decide whether or not to alter atom:updated. However, as the decision is left to the discretion of the publisher, these examples are not to be considered normative:

* Spelling corrections which do not significantly affect the meaning or readability of an entry might not warrant altering atom:updated:

   Original: "I carved a pumkin on Halloween."
   Corrected: "I carved a pumpkin on Halloween."

* Spelling corrections which significantly affect the meaning or readability of an entry might warrant altering atom:updated:

   Original: "I work in a restaurant. I eat people."
   Corrected: "I work in a restaurant. I seat people."

   Original: "My anme is Moe."
   Corrected: "My name is Joe."

* Rewriting which does not significantly affect the meaning of an entry might not warrant altering atom:updated:

Original: "Yesterday, I went to the store, ate a big lunch, did my homework, and watched TV."
Modified: "Yesterday, I had a big lunch, did some shopping, watched TV, and did some homework."


* Rewriting which does significantly affect the meaning of an entry might warrant altering atom:updated:

Original: "Yesterday, I went to the store, ate a big lunch, did my homework, and watched TV."
Modified: "Yesterday, I ate my homework for lunch and bought a big TV at the store."


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