Authors, AD,
* Mahesh (as AD), please reply to #5.
While reviewing this document during AUTH48, please resolve (as necessary) the
following questions, which are also in the XML file.
1) <!--[rfced] To avoid back-to-back use of "For example", may we update
the second occurrence as follows?
Original:
For example, a
server can be a network controller or a router in a provider
network.
For example, a bearer request is first created using a name which
is assigned by the client, but if this feature is supported, the
request will also include a server-generated reference.
Perhaps:
For example, a
server can be a network controller or a router in a provider
network.
As another example, a bearer request is first created using a name that
is assigned by the client, but if this feature is supported, the
request will also include a server-generated reference.
-->
2) <!--[rfced] To improve readability, may we update "to" to "for"?
Original:
* 'bw-per-site': The bandwidth is to all ACs that belong to the
same site.
Perhaps:
'bw-per-site': The bandwidth is for all ACs that belong to the
same site.
-->
3) <!-- [rfced] We note that the following reference is cited only in
the YANG module. In order to have a 1:1 matchup between the references
section and the text, may we add the following reference entry to
the Normative References and add it to the list of citations preceding
the YANG module?
Original:
This module uses types defined in [RFC6991], [RFC8177], and
[RFC9181].
Perhaps:
This module uses types defined in [RFC6991], [RFC8177],
[RFC9181], and [IEEE_802.1Q].
...
[IEEE_802.1Q]
IEEE, "IEEE Standard for Local and Metropolitan Area
Networks-Bridges and Bridged Networks", IEEE Std 802.1Q-
2022, DOI 10.1109/IEEESTD.2022.10004498, December 2022,
<https://doi.org/10.1109/IEEESTD.2022.10004498>.
-->
4) <!--[rfced] FYI, the YANG module has been updated per the
formatting option of pyang. Please let us know any concerns.
-->
5) <!--[rfced] *AD - We note that there is some text in the
Security Considerations that differs from the template on
<https://wiki.ietf.org/group/ops/yang-security-guidelines>. Please
review and let us know if the text is acceptable. Specifically:
- Paragraph 5 matches the template except for the last sentence
is an addition. Paragraph 6 does not seem to correspond to the template.
- This sentence is not present, although the template says to include it.
"There are no particularly sensitive RPC or action operations."
If it should be added, should it be at the end of the section?
-->
6) <!-- [rfced] Please review the "type" attribute of each sourcecode element
in the XML file to ensure correctness. If the current list of preferred
values for "type"
(https://www.rfc-editor.org/rpc/wiki/doku.php?id=sourcecode-types)
does not contain an applicable type, then feel free to let us know.
Also, it is acceptable to leave the "type" attribute not set.
-->
7) <!--[rfced] Abbreviation
a) FYI - We have added expansions for the following abbreviation
per Section 3.6 of RFC 7322 ("RFC Style Guide"). Please review each
expansion in the document carefully to ensure correctness.
Operations, Administration, and Maintenance (OAM)
b) Both the expansion and the acronym for the following terms are used
throughout the document. Would you like to update to using the expansion upon
first usage and the acronym for the rest of the document?
Attachment Circuit (AC)
Service Function (SF)
-->
8) <!-- [rfced] Please review the "Inclusive Language" portion of the online
Style Guide <https://www.rfc-editor.org/styleguide/part2/#inclusive_language>
and let us know if any changes are needed. Updates of this nature typically
result in more precise language, which is helpful for readers.
For example, please consider whether the following should be updated:
black-hole
-->
Thank you.
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RFC9833 (draft-ietf-opsawg-teas-common-ac-15)
Title : A Common YANG Data Model for Attachment Circuits
Author(s) : M. Boucadair, R. Roberts, O. Gonzalez de Dios, S. Barguil
Giraldo, B. Wu
WG Chair(s) : Joe Clarke, Benoît Claise
Area Director(s) : Mohamed Boucadair, Mahesh Jethanandani
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