Hi Allana, The changes look good to me. Thanks.
> On Aug 14, 2025, at 9:36 AM, Alanna Paloma <apal...@staff.rfc-editor.org> > wrote: > > Hi Mahesh, > > Thank you for your reply. We’ve updated the Security Considerations section > accordingly. > > The files have been posted here (please refresh): > https://www.rfc-editor.org/authors/rfc9835.xml > https://www.rfc-editor.org/authors/rfc9835.txt > https://www.rfc-editor.org/authors/rfc9835.html > https://www.rfc-editor.org/authors/rfc9835.pdf > > The relevant diff files have been posted here: > https://www.rfc-editor.org/authors/rfc9835-diff.html (comprehensive diff) > https://www.rfc-editor.org/authors/rfc9835-auth48diff.html (AUTH48 changes) > https://www.rfc-editor.org/authors/rfc9835-auth48rfcdiff.html (AUTH48 changes > side by side) > > For the AUTH48 status of this document, please see: > https://www.rfc-editor.org/auth48/rfc9835 > > Thank you, > RFC Editor/ap > >> On Aug 13, 2025, at 4:36 PM, Mahesh Jethanandani <mjethanand...@gmail.com> >> wrote: >> >> Hi, >> >>> On Aug 11, 2025, at 10:50 PM, rfc-edi...@rfc-editor.org wrote: >>> >>> Authors, AD, >>> >>> * Mahesh (as AD), please reply to #4. >>> >>> While reviewing this document during AUTH48, please resolve (as necessary) >>> the following questions, which are also in the XML file. >>> >>> 1) <!--[rfced] We note that Figure 4 uses "CE#1" and "CE#2", while other >>> figures in the document use "CE1" and "CE2". May we update the CEs in >>> Figure 4 to match the other figures in the document? >>> >>> If so, both artworks (svg and ascii-art) will be updated accordingly. >>> --> >>> >>> >>> 2) <!--[rfced] To improve readability, may we update "to" to "for"? >>> >>> Original: >>> 'bw-per-site': The bandwidth is to all peer SAPs that belong to >>> the same site. >>> >>> Perhaps: >>> 'bw-per-site': The bandwidth is for all peer SAPs that belong to >>> the same site. >>> --> >>> >>> >>> 3) <!--[rfced] FYI, this YANG module has been updated per the >>> formatting option of pyang. Please let us know any concerns. >>> --> >>> >>> >>> 4) <!--[rfced] *AD - We note that there is some text in the >>> Security Considerations section that differs from the template on >>> <https://wiki.ietf.org/group/ops/yang-security-guidelines>. Please >>> review and let us know if the text is acceptable. >>> >>> For example: >>> - This sentence is not present; should it be added? >>> "There are no particularly sensitive RPC or action operations." >>> If so, should it be at the end of the section? >>> (Your reply to this question will also be applied to RFC 9836.) >> >> Yes, please add the statement to the end of the section. >> >>> >>> From the guidelines page: >>> "If the data model contains any particularly sensitive RPC or action >>> operations, then those operations must be listed here, along with an >>> explanation of the associated specific sensitivity or vulnerability >>> concerns. Otherwise, state: 'There are no particularly sensitive RPC or >>> action operations.'" >>> >>> - The last two paragraphs (after the readable nodes section) do >>> not seem to be within a section of the template. >>> —> >>> >> >> Please do something similar to what I recommended on the other document. Let >> us move the two paragraphs to the beginning of the Security Considerations >> section, and before the line “This section is modeled after ….”. That >> statement should be further modified as follows: >> >> OLD: >> This section is modeled after the template described in Section 3.7 of >> [YANG-GUIDELINES]. >> >> NEW: >> The remaining section is modeled after the template described in Section >> 3.7.1 of [YANG-GUIDELINES]. >> >> Thanks. >> >>> >>> 5) <!-- [rfced] Please review the "type" attribute of each sourcecode >>> element >>> in the XML file to ensure correctness. If the current list of preferred >>> values for "type" >>> (https://www.rfc-editor.org/rpc/wiki/doku.php?id=sourcecode-types) >>> does not contain an applicable type, then feel free to let us know. >>> Also, it is acceptable to leave the "type" attribute not set. >>> --> >>> >>> >>> 6) <!-- [rfced] Throughout the text, the following terminology appears to >>> be used >>> inconsistently. Please review these occurrences and let us know if/how they >>> may be made consistent. >>> >>> Hold Time vs. holdtime >>> Network Slice Service vs. Network Slice >>> --> >>> >>> >>> 7) <!--[rfced] Abbreviations >>> >>> a) Both the expansion and the acronym for the following terms are used >>> throughout the document. Would you like to update to using the expansion >>> upon first usage and the acronym for the rest of the document for >>> consistency? >>> >>> attachment circuit (AC) >>> Customer Edge (CE) >>> Layer 2 VPN (L2VPN) >>> Layer 3 VPN (L3VPN) >>> Provider Edge (PE) >>> Service Attachment Point (SAP) >>> >>> b) FYI - We have added expansions for the following abbreviation >>> per Section 3.6 of RFC 7322 ("RFC Style Guide"). 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