Thanks, Iain, Like I said there are way too many mistakes in the document to spend a great deal of time on it, but your comments are what I need to clean it up for a more reviewable chapter....
On Mon, 2005-02-07 at 19:40 +0000, Iain Roberts wrote: > Rick, > > Nice document - there's loads of good stuff in there. > > I've done as much as I can in one pass, though I think there's still a > way to go ;-) > > Notes : > > 1. Far more people will be interested in the outline, FAQ and changelog > than in the details of what OSS is and how the licensing works, so I > suggest the licensing and OSS stuff be moved to the end. I haven't done > this. > > 2. I've made some changes to the headings, but I haven't rebuilt the index. > > 3. I'd keep the images of the components, but I have removed the File > > Open image near the beginning - I didn't think it added anything. > > 4. I have tried to simplify some sections (especially the OSS and > licensing parts) and strip out extra jargon where possible. I figure > that, for anyone who doesn't understand it already, getting through an > explanation of OSS and licensing is going to be hard work and they'll > need all the help they can get. > > 5. Some parts start off with a big negative section, like saying why > people criticize OSS. I have to stop myself doing that, because you > just do the critics' work for them. I've tried to amend it to keep it > positive. > > 6. Some phrases just seemed a bit over the top to me (e.g. > "OpenOffice.org is the greatest piece of software the world has ever > seen or will ever see" - just kidding, but you know what I mean ;-) ). > I've taken out some of those. > > 7. In the line about whether each office suite has the ability to open > WordPerfect files, you've got "WordPerfect only" for OOo. I couldn't > see what else might go in, so I thought either there's something missing > or it should just say "yes". > > Cheers, > > Iain. > > > Rick Barnes wrote: > > I have uploaded "What is OOo?" for review...this version is a major > > rewrite from what I originally received. Off-list mail suggested a few > > things and now it is 21 pages. The text is dense, which is good because > > it is easier to edit out than edit in...for me at least. > > > > Don't try to do much grammar or spell checking, as I know some of this > > is rough from my cutting and pasting. I am looking for guidance on the > > heading (or document) structure, and whether any text should be > > shortened, simplified, moved or deleted. Also the Feature comparison > > tables have extra rows for you to add features you may think I > > overlooked. There are several Notes so watch for them. The images of > > the components should probably not stay??? > > > > I added sections on Getting the software, system requirements and tech > > support. I know these are covered elsewhere in detail, but they seem to > > fit here...the context and content is very different. > > > > ***Please, let me know of any factual or technical errors!!! > > > > After some initial feed back I can edit this to a near final state > > quickly. Unfortunately I work best from chaos ;-) > > > > -- Regards, Rick Barnes www.nostabo.net ******************************************************************* PRIVILEGED - PRIVATE AND CONFIDENTIAL This electronic mail is solely for the use of the addressee and may contain information which is confidential or privileged. If you receive this electronic mail in error, please delete it from your system immediately and notify the sender by electronic mail or using any of the contact details noted herein. This e-mail sent via Evolution 2.0.3 running on a Linux 2.6.10 kernel.
