> From: Shida Schubert [[email protected]]
>
> I did a thorough review of the draft before submitting
> to the IESG and I sent the following comments along
> with a draft with my suggested edits (all nits).
A lot of improvements!
But I think the last paragraph of section 6.2 has some minor edit
mistakes which damage the grammar:
If the caller's agent becomes unwilling ??? no longer wants to initiate
the CC call (e.g., because the calling user???caller has deactivated
CC), the caller's agent terminates the subscription in accordance
with [RFC3265] or suspends the subscription(s) as specified in
subclause 6.5.
And in section 6.6, this sentence is missing a phrase:
Note that the caller's agent's policy about resumption may
be manually initiated and thus should not be automatically resumed.
Perhaps,
Note that the caller's agent's policy about resumption may be
>>>that it must be<<< manually initiated and thus should not be
automatically resumed.
Looks good!
Dale
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