[ As a chair ] Authors updated the draft reflecting Dale's comments.
Please see the changes to make sure there is no further issues. If there isn't I will get the author to post their draft and write up the proto-writeup based on the version 11 referenced here. If you believe we need to further discuss the draft please let your voice heard by posting your opinion within a week. http://bliss-ietf.org/drafts/draft-ietf-bliss-call-completion-11.txt http://bliss-ietf.org/drafts/diff_10_11.html Regards Shida On Sep 2, 2011, at 3:53 AM, Worley, Dale R (Dale) wrote: >> From: Shida Schubert [[email protected]] >> >> I did a thorough review of the draft before submitting >> to the IESG and I sent the following comments along >> with a draft with my suggested edits (all nits). > > A lot of improvements! > > But I think the last paragraph of section 6.2 has some minor edit > mistakes which damage the grammar: > > If the caller's agent becomes unwilling ??? no longer wants to initiate > the CC call (e.g., because the calling user???caller has deactivated > CC), the caller's agent terminates the subscription in accordance > with [RFC3265] or suspends the subscription(s) as specified in > subclause 6.5. > > And in section 6.6, this sentence is missing a phrase: > > Note that the caller's agent's policy about resumption may > be manually initiated and thus should not be automatically resumed. > > Perhaps, > > Note that the caller's agent's policy about resumption may be >>>> that it must be<<< manually initiated and thus should not be > automatically resumed. > > Looks good! > > Dale _______________________________________________ BLISS mailing list [email protected] https://www.ietf.org/mailman/listinfo/bliss
