In a message dated 6/13/2004 7:09:12 PM US Mountain Standard Time, [EMAIL PROTECTED] writes:
Sorry that no one was replying. I like it, but I fear that I am missing some of the elaborately set up puns. I know you mentioned the Farley's dog thing a couple of months ago--I certainly don't share the cultural referent for that one! Travels with Charley So if in adding one more sentence... The continent he was on was tentatively to be named Farley, after Admiral Anderson's genetically unmodified normal pet dog. That dog traveled everywhere the admiral went. And Admiral Anderson has read Steinbeck, so... I like the characters of the Tytal, and their penchant for joking. But they don't wake up until a few minutes before sunrise. Maybe the solution is to just put out a lot of puns/references, not to spend a huge build-up on any of them, and figure that the reader will appreciate a good fraction. Did doing and over done. Rupert and Fred go on to quote Shakespeare, the aged professor type that they both once had, a bit of Gilbert and Sullivan, and of course, that tytlal mutilated phrase book. Action? Well, there usually is action in a story. It wouldn't be a bad thing. : ) After the tytlal wake up, and instantly escape from the cube, there's the explination to everyone's actions. Right now...at 6919, I have them walking the cube walls, and false dawn will start by the time they reach the third corner. ---David What you didn't say, and what I'm in constant fear of, is that there's gonna be too much detail between the set-up and the actual escape. But where else can one put an expanded layout of early Terragen history, the explination of the changes made from Sundiver to Startide Rising, Tytlal biology, Synthian psychology, and a few of the so far unused 'loopholes' that our good Dr. has written into the Uplift Universe. (Even if he didn't know that they were even there.) There aint never going to be no Avoiding Aliens. Later in the story we have references to Clausewitz, Ovaltine, and one of the most famous lines from Steve Allen. William Taylor
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