Hi Barbara, Here are my comments on the DC article:
Page 5: 2nd paragraph, I think it is more accurate to say: The image created by the distribution constructor using the default configuration file is comparable to the Live CD image that's distributed as the OpenSolaris 2008.11 release. However, you can modify the content of the default configuration file, ....... ------ Page 6, description of "Finalizer scripts", 3rd sentence: The scripts.... will generate the image we distribute as Open solaris 2008.11 live cd. ---------- Page 6, description of "Finalizer scripts", the Note section: I think it is better to encourage them to create their own script, do not modify the original. They can make a copy of the original and modify the copy and then, modify the manifest to point to the copy. -------------- Page 7, the requirement section, "Open Solaris 2008.11" requirement: Build 99 or later is required now. However, I don't think it is good to tell people to use the older builds because we fixed many bugs in DC since build 99. So, I think it is best to say that they have to use 2008.11. ----------- Page 7, the requirement section, "Required packages" requirement: All the packages listed should already be installed as part of the Live CD. Only the SUNWdistro-const package need to be installed by the user. --------------- Page 8, the requirement section, "Network access" requirement, 2nd paragraph: It's not just "an IPS repository". They can specify one or more repository. They just need to have network access to all the repos they specified. -------------- Page 8, Distribution Constructor Files section, the "Note".. /usr/bin/ManifestRead is a program, not directory. ----------- Page 9, Primary Manifest Sections table: <distro_constr_params>, is not for specifying to use checkpointing or not. <checkpoint_enable> is the tag for that. ------------ page 13, table 2, and page 15, example 2-2, examples 2-4. the python example of using server socket file name. from osol_install.ManifestRead import ManifestRead This is part of the code, don't mix it with the description. ----- page 15, example 2-3, should be "shell script" ------------ page 17, table 2-3, the description of "-l", last sentence, I think it is better to say that "The default manifest includes the following steps". ------------- Thanks, --Karen Barbara.Lundquist at sun.com wrote: > Install gang, > > This is the final review for the Automated Installer documentation > and the Distribution Constructor documentation before I deliver > these documents this Friday, 11/14. Thank you for all the edits > I received to date! > > Please send me your final edits ASAP. > > - I will continue to make edits this week, but > I may need to postpone some revisions until a later delivery, if > time runs out. > > - For the AI article, I will be adding more material this week from > Sundar and other > engineers about the criteria manifest and more, as time permits. > > - Does the DC team have a final manifest file with comments done? > > AI man page: > http://www.opensolaris.org/os/project/caiman/files/installadm.1m.txt > > AI article: > http://www.opensolaris.org/os/project/caiman/files/AIinstallNearFinal.pdf > > DC man page: > http://www.opensolaris.org/os/project/caiman/files/distro_const.1m.txt > > DC article: > http://www.opensolaris.org/os/project/caiman/files/DistroConstNearFinal.pdf > > Thanks in advance! > Barbara > > > _______________________________________________ > caiman-discuss mailing list > caiman-discuss at opensolaris.org > http://mail.opensolaris.org/mailman/listinfo/caiman-discuss >
