paul if you will invite me at this email address I will do an edit for
you, as long as you realize that I am pretty picky and promise not to
get bent ;) It's your resume and if you don't like what I will do
Google Docs gives you the option of just reverting back.

On 1/12/07, Gruss Gott <[EMAIL PROTECTED]> wrote:
> > Dana wrote:
> > there is a place where you have "there" that should be "their".
>
> Lots of spelling and grammatical errors like this sentence:  "By
> taking his designs and creating a photo album so that he can quickly
> get his images to the publishing community."
>
> That doesn't make any sense.  There are also places where you use the
> wrong tense, e.g., "create" instead of "created".
>
> Also your objective is a summary, not an objective.  Which, BTW,
> should effectively answer the question of what you want to do with
> your career and give a hint of where you see yourself in 5 years.
> What do you want?  Are you a heads down coder who works alone in the
> dark or do you like teams or are you looking for more of an architect
> role or would you like to move into management?  etc. etc.  Do you
> want to learn new tech?  be a trainer?  I could go on and on :)
>
> A few sentences in your objective should tell me where you fit into my team.
>
> I'd also take out words and phrases like "highly functional" which
> doesn't mean anything and put in lots of action word and phrases like,
> "I delivered ..."  Numbers are good too - anyplace you can say you
> delivered "on-time" or "ahead of delivery date" and "under budget by
> x%", etc is very helpful.
>
> Your experience should say that you can do what I need you to do
> because you've done it and can prove it.  You should show how you take
> things you haven't done before, figured them out, and delivered them
> on time and on budget.
>
> I should feel comfortable that you can fill a hole on my team, and
> come up to speed quickly and cheaply.  I need you productive in a
> week: we've got a big project here with a diverse cross-functional
> team that hasn't worked together before.  I'm thinking you might work
> well as the dev team lead, but ...
>
> your resume doesn't tell me if you could handle that or not.  And if
> it did, I don't know if you'd want too.
>
> (just an example, of the audience you might want to write for)
>
> 

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