On Mon, Nov 10, 2003 at 07:35:12PM +0100, Christian Perrier wrote: > Package: prebaseconfig > Severity: normal > > Well, this one is maybe more important than others....At least, ALL users of > d-i will see it.... > > So, please, native English speakers, check my suggestions... > > Detailed rationale: > > Template: prebaseconfig/reboot_in_progress > Type: note > -_Description: The machine will now reboot. > - When you reboot the system, you'll need to make sure you are booting > +_Description: System reboot > + The system will now reboot. > + . > + Before this reboot occurs, you'll need to make sure you are booting > from the right media. > . > - If you are booting from the local disk, make sure there are no > + If you are booting from the local disk, check that there are no > floppies in the floppy drives and no CD-ROM in the tray. If you made > - a custom boot floppy and want to boot from that, you should put that > - floppy in the first floppy drive. Finally, you can restart the > - installation system by booting from your install media. > + a custom boot floppy and want to boot from it, you should put that > + floppy in the first floppy drive. > + . > + You may also restart the installation system by booting from your > + installation media. > . > Please take care of all that before you continue. > > 1) Make this look more like a title > 2) ....thus add "The system will now reboot" as a separated paragraph. > "system" seems better than "machine" to me... > > 3) Before this reboot occurs is maybe not the best possible. English > speakers needed..:-) > > 4) s/make sure/check that : look sbetter to me but your mileage may vary > > 5) boot from it or boot from that?
'it' is correct. Everything looks fine here. > I add a paragraph as the suggestion for rebooting from the install(ation) > media is another idea and should appear more easily, imho > > -- System Information: > Debian Release: testing/unstable > Architecture: i386 > Kernel: Linux mykerinos 2.4.22 #2 Mon Sep 29 15:12:10 CEST 2003 i686 > Locale: LANG=fr_FR.UTF-8, LC_CTYPE=fr_FR.UTF-8 (ignored: LC_ALL set to fr_FR.UTF-8) > > > > -- > To UNSUBSCRIBE, email to [EMAIL PROTECTED] > with a subject of "unsubscribe". Trouble? Contact [EMAIL PROTECTED] > -- Debian GNU/Linux Operating System By the People, For the People Chris Tillman (a people instance) toff one at cox dot net -- To UNSUBSCRIBE, email to [EMAIL PROTECTED] with a subject of "unsubscribe". Trouble? Contact [EMAIL PROTECTED]
