Hi Vincent e.a., On Thu, Nov 30, 2017 at 02:37:27PM +1100, Vincent McIntyre wrote: > > I have a few suggestions.
Great, thanks for proofreading: very helpful for a non-native speaker like me :) Have applied all your suggestions as-is, except for: > On Thu, Nov 30, 2017 at 03:36:53AM +0100, Joost van Baal-Ilić wrote: [...] > > Index: customizing.sgml > > =================================================================== > > --- customizing.sgml (revision 11724) > > +++ customizing.sgml (working copy) > > @@ -13,6 +13,7 @@ > > environment variable. For details, see the manual page > > <manref name="papersize" section="5">. > > > > + > > <sect id="hardwareaccess">How can I provide access to hardware peripherals, > > without compromising security? [...] > > +default target file <tt>/lib/systemd/system/default.target</tt>. The > > files for > > +these services and targets are installed during Debian package > > installation. > > Missing text?: > > +Usually, a package providing a service controlled by systemd > +will <i>enable</i> it at installation time. changed that to: The files for these services and targets are installed during Debian package installation and the service provided by the package will be <i>enabled</i>. If you explicitly do <i>not</i> wish to run a packages service during boot-up, instead of removing the installed package, you can run the command Bye, Joost PS: current version is, as always, available from https://anonscm.debian.org/viewvc/ddp/manuals/trunk/debian-faq/customizing.sgml?view=co&content-type=text%2Fplain More proofreads welcome.
