On Thu, 08 Dec 2005 18:04:58 +0100 Simon Josefsson wrote:
> Justin Pryzby <[EMAIL PROTECTED]> writes:
>
> > On Mon, Nov 21, 2005 at 09:39:34PM +0100, Francesco Poli wrote:
[...]
> > > s/unauthorized redistributed/redistributed unofficial/ , I would
> > > say...
> > > The term "unauthorized" makes me think about a license violation,
> > > which is not what is meant here, IIUC.
> > Agree; I considered suggesting "not explicitly authorized".
>
> I agree, and I'm using the wording suggested by Nathanael; "without
> separate permission".
>
> > I would also suggest to remove the preface "This specifically
> > implies, for instance, that", and just use the additional "don't
> > imply endorsement" phrase.
>
> Agreed. I have changed the complete license to:
>
> c. The Contributor grants third parties the irrevocable
> right to copy, use and distribute the Contribution, with
> or without modification, in any medium, without royalty,
> provided that unauthorized redistributed modified works
^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^
> do not contain misleading author, version, name of work,
> or endorsement information. Without separate permission,
> redistributed modified works must (a) not claim
> endorsement of the modified work by the IETF, IESG, IANA,
> IAB, ISOC, RFC Editor, or any similar organization, and
> (b) remove any claims of status as an Internet Standard,
> for example, by removing the RFC boilerplate. The IETF
> suggests that any citation or excerpt of unmodified text
> reference the RFC or other document from which the text
> is derived.
You seem to have missed one occurrence of "unauthorized redistributed".
I would suggest suppressing "unauthorized" there...
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