Andrew Greig wrote:
> Hi,
> 
> Thanks for the effort to produce the pamphlet, it is a lot or work.

I can not take all the credit.  I downloaded from the wiki site the
text, in German, and ran it through the translate extension.  The using
cut and paste put it in the tri-fold, which I have since modified to
work better.

>>From a visual perspective, it is a lot of words, which can be daunting
> to the receiver.  It would benefit from more "white space" and at least
> one clear screenshot of a writer page showing the tool bars (which could
> span a fold).  With the discussion of suitability for user groups, many
> of the points were common, and could have shared a common space at the
> top, the others need to be bullet points well spaced.
> 
> Rather than the list of links on the brochure, just one would suffice,
> to the OOo homepage. By trimming much of the editorial whitespace can be
> made available to allow the bullet points to stand out.
> 
> The idea of a pamphlet is to arrest the receiver's attention.  Where it
> is too densely populated with words, it is often binned because it is
> too much effort. We don't have to tell the whole story up front, we just
> have to get them to read it, go to the website and download OOo.
> 
> The website should cover the benefits for different user groups in more
> detail, starting with a link like "More info for pamphlet readers" for
> example.
> 
> Now that the initial hard work is done, the editing can really turn this
> into a fantastic resource.  The idea (which has just sprung to mind as I
> write this) could be developed further by having specific pamphlets for
> the different market segments: Home, Business, Education, Government. If
> the initial pamphlet drives people to the website, then they could
> download a pamphlet to take back to their particular organisation, to
> initiate the discussion about using OOo.
> 
> Cheers
> 
> 
> Andrew Greig
> Community Distributor, OpenOffice.org
> Melbourne, Australia

Thanks for the comments and feedback.  I will go back and make the
changes and re-upload for more review.  This is the reason I wanted
someone else to look at it.  If someone else wises to give the editing a
go let me know.

--
Andy Brown
La Mesa, CA  91942
www.the-martin-byrd.net/openoffice.org.html
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