Volker, Thank you for these edits! I've made all the corrections for these items in my master and will post final copy .pdf as FYI after delivery.
Barbara On 10/26/08 15:56, Volker A. Brandt wrote: >> The near-final copy of the Getting Started Guide is posted at: >> >> http://www.opensolaris.org/os/project/caiman/files/getstart2.pdf >> > > I am a bit confused by the first paragraph under "Live CD and Installer" > on page 6. It seems that "nwamd" was replaced by the reference to > chapter 5. > > On page 7, in the first paragraph under "Image Packaging System (IPS CLI)" > I would add a "(CLI)" after "command-line interface", similar to > "(IPS)" after "Image Packaging System". Wouldn't take up much space > so it shouldn't hurt. > > On page 23, the "zpool attach" command is explained. The text > says "The following example illustrates a ZFS file system setup with a > nonredundant configuration:". But the output of "zpool status" > shows a mirror vdev, i.e. a redundant configuration. > > Page 25, 4th line from the bottom: > > "The contents of the GRUB menu.lst file dictate what..." > > sounds a little less harsh when changed to > > "The contents of the GRUB menu.lst file define what..." > > On page 37, the word "Syntax:" preceding the pkg image-update > command is inconsistent with all the other code examples. Just > omit the "Syntax:". > > > Regards -- Volker > -------------- next part -------------- An HTML attachment was scrubbed... URL: <http://mail.opensolaris.org/pipermail/docs-discuss/attachments/20081027/859626cb/attachment.html>
