Greetings. Again, my apologies for being late. It's been quite a month. I'm still trying to figure out where August went, and now it's already November.
I found very little to nit-pick on this revision. Another job well done. :-) The few notes I have are: Contents - still list "Avoid Abbreviations ..." I suspect this is a tool issue and will go away when the segment actually gets dropped. p. 16 - Under "Do Not Arbitrarily ..." The second sentence starts with "Nor should you..." I would suggest changing it to: "...in your document, nor should you..." I think this is less awkward (and satisfies the rigorous enforcers of the "Do not start a sentence with..." folks). Index: Under "international audiences", the first entry is "abbreviations and acronyms and," This seems awkward with the double "and." I'm not sure how best to clean it up; I have a few different ideas. The easiest may be to change the first "and" to a comma. Or maybe just drop the second "and" ?? That's about it. I must admit that I did not read through the entire chapter, word by word, with the usual plodding diligence I use for these reviews, so I'm hoping nothing has slipped past. Again, my apologies. Rainer --- Mind the gap. This message posted from opensolaris.org
